[Everlasting Hypnotism]

Everlasting hypnotism

who would have thought she would do this to him?

all it took was a conversation,

and it was in no relation 

to what the shadows whispered

When he felt most disturbed 

and left no stone unturned.

Trying to search for something 

that he himself doesn't know is missing.

He's lost out there,

you should go prepared.

There's no telling what you'll find

all I'm here to do is remind 

you, that you've got to wake up.




  • Elegant_Style

    🙂 🙂 this is an awesome first poem.... happy writing

    • fauxsabotage

      Thank you Elegant_Style! 😁 Much appreciated! 🙂

    • Christina8

      Welcome to MPS! Awesome first poem. Thanks for sharing!

    • GMC

      Very nice :3


      Great way to enter this site , with a very well written piece of work....look forward to more

      • fauxsabotage

        Thank you pharaoh! It's awesome to get reviews on my work! 🙂

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        WELCOME FS ~ Thanks you fora very challenging first poem ! It happens we do allow ourselves to be hynotised by another person ~ Especially MEN by LADIES ~ they are so hypnotic. Love the advice in the last line ~ if we are mesmerised by someone ! YOU'VE GOT TO WAKE UP ! Love the structure of the poem ~ rhyming couplets and full of mesmerising rhythm ! Thanks for sharing ~ more please. Please check my poems ~ YOURS BRIAN.(UK)

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