alanis98

Don't punish yourself

if we are going through a certain trial

We can easily loose our smile

We can tend to punish ourselves,

When we feel overwhelmed

But put down that knife or blade

Remember a loved one will always come to your aid

There are other ways to express your emotions

I know you feel broken

But through a song, a dance, through art and poems you can feel whole again,

Remember someone loves you

So put down that alcohol and cocaine,

Please confide in someone,

And put down that rope and gun

Even though I may not know I love you. 

Please rethink what your about to do

Things will get better with time

I pray you receive justice for whatever the crime,

Stay hopeful stay positive

Don't try anything addictive,

Be strong and find a friend,

Your soul they will try to mend

Please remember that your loved

No matter who you are or what you look like.

Don't punish yourself for whatever your going through,

Your loved too.💗

Comments5

  • alanis98

    As I'm new to poetry please let me know what you think I need to work on. I normally just write​ what comes from my heart, but please let me know

  • Somerica

    Really vivid and interesting. It just has narrative sound to it. Just figure what kinda style you want write. But other the poem Was good.

    • alanis98

      Thank you for your feedback back I love writing I always have I just need it to sound better or flow better

    • Augustus

      I don't know much about poetry either, only what I've learned from this site. Your poem is what they call free verse, without specific meter and no rhyme. It reads easily where the reader does not have to stop, hesitate and reread the last sentence to make sense out of it. You are consistent throughout about your friends problem and you speaking from the heart. Nicely done.

    • alanis98

      Thank you for your feedback and support it means a lot. Xxx

    • Somerica

      Well written. You poem.



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