Waiting For Okay

Naeners

It used to hurt
The pain in my chest
When you said those things
They made me feel like less
I'd cry
I'd scream
I'd stomp my feet
Why would you say such things to me
But now I'm numb
I don't feel at all
No fighting back
No punching walls
You wanted me scared
Well thats too bad
I'm not scared
I'm not even mad
Just rotting inside
Waiting for the day
When you are gone
And I can be okay

  • Author: Naeners (Offline Offline)
  • Published: May 28th, 2017 10:02
  • Comment from author about the poem: Don't know what to say about this poem, just that it means a lot to me. Please tell me what you think. Constructive criticism is always welcomed.
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  • Augustus

    I believe it is a perfect little poem. It is consistent with a theme of how you feel after what appears to be an abusive relationship. There is brevity, not boring the reader with a treatise on abuse. There are several phrases that rhyme. Carefull with spelling of too (too bad). You don't have to capitalize the first word of each phrase. Leaving out periods at the end of short phrases is pleasing to the eye as you did and avoids cclitter. I love this poem.

    • Naeners

      This is probably one of the kindest and well thought out comments I have ever gotten! Plus I thank you for the advice as I am always looking to improve 🙂



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