Brand new heart,
Shiny and clean.
But people are evil,
And that's what the heart believed.
So it was worn down,
And she was in pain.
And her heart was broken,
As she went insane.
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Author:
Allan (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: June 13th, 2017 04:29
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Comments2
Good little poem, could do with shortening the last line of stanza 1, slows down the pace a little too much. Other than that its perfect.
Thank you. And I apologize if this sounds rude, but would you mind giving me an example of how to make it better? I would like to perfect my work, if that's even possible, and this could help me a great deal - A
It's what's in your heart that gets to you. Nice
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