On endless seas my soul adrift
I dream of shores the sweetest gift
Its peace I search I know not how
Lifes raging waves crash cross my bow
My course I set to no avail
As cyclone winds do fill my sail
A gentle touch my heart does ache
I sail alone my love lost fate
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Author:
Lost in Murphy (
Offline) - Published: July 2nd, 2017 18:21
- Comment from author about the poem: I wrote this for someone who could not rise above the scars of her past. This is my first attempt at writing. Tell me what you think
- Category: Love
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My honest thoughts...Your rhymes are fantastic. Gorgeous verses. The only thing that threw me was the form. I just needed a way at first read to tell line from line. Otherwise, this is beautiful. Don't you DARE throw another away! Happy to have you.
I wrote this today with tears in my eyes and had no intention of sharing. I never thought anybody would appreciate what I wrote that's why they all ended up in the trash can. But your words of encouragement have truly lifted my spirits.
Thank you so much for your kind words.
This is a wonderful place
beginners of poetry do the best job
I had no idea. It never seemed that special to me. Now I want to share. Thank you, thank you.
hey L I M,
beginners are better because they don't have lots of their previous poems in their way.
its just statistics.
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Great rhyme and meter for your inaugural night on the water; I don't expect you will be adrift for long my friend.
Thank you. I'm learning to embrace rather than fear that which motivates me
For one who claims to be adrift, you seem supremely grounded. Just like you, I am a newcomer to the site and already love it as I'm sure you do. Great feelings, all laid bare!
I built a wall, almost 20 years now. It's easy to appear grounded behind a smile you paint on every day. It's when I open up
I start to break. I need this outlet. I'm glad we both found this beautiful place. Thank you
Dont throw away anything now. Keep those unfinished sketches of emotion and return to them when at peace. You'll find yourself building upon them. Here i have found like minded souls who welcome my very personal outcry of words. This place will empower you too i'm sure.
I feel the bonding of a community I wish I had reached out to so long ago. I know you all will inspire and guide me and for that I am eternally grateful. I do feel humbled. Thank you for inviting me in
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