Candlewitch

Sweet Velvet : senryu string

senryu string: sweet velvet

lovely sweet velvet
summer heat the dark foundling
soft night comes calling

oh somber-eyed elf
riding the last horizon
read soul of my eyes

moon lit immersion
requesting ever faintly
kiss this pain away

Comments9

  • Heather T

    Cat, I'm bewitched! You've cast a tender spell here.

    • Candlewitch

      dear Heather,

      I am so glad you liked my poem! thank you!

      *hugs, Cat

    • BRIAN & ANGELA

      Senryu strings spawn beautiful poems ~ this i no exception ! Thanks for caring & sharing ~ love BRIAN (UK) Please check my poems & fusions ~ Thanks B

      • Candlewitch

        hello Brian!

        thank you for reading and commenting on my poem 🙂 I will check out your poems!

        *hugs, Cat

      • Michael Edwards

        A little piece of magic - beautiful writing.

        • Candlewitch

          hello Michael,

          that is my middle name, but it is spelled: Micole! thank you for reading my poem and leaving such a nice comment 🙂

          *hugs, Cat

        • Jemerina

          Beautiful. A few words say so much.

          • Candlewitch

            hello Jemerina,

            it is very nice to meet you! thank you for your response!

            *hugs, Cat

          • Candlewitch

            yes, "if only"... thanks for your response.

            *hugs, Cat

          • valene

            Well hello my friend! I just happened to come on for a few and here you are! I like the calming feel of this Cat. On a warm summer day as night begins to settle in, the warmth can be comforting rather than the humid heat during the day especially if there's a slight breeze. And as the sun sets it creates an amazing spectrum, as though it knows we all need something to lift our spirits at times. Your last verse is the perfect ending!

            • Candlewitch

              Hello, my good friend!

              it is so very good to see you here! I think I have left N.P. forever. this is a much better site. thank you for recommending it! I haven't been here long, but a few days. and I have found poets that I love to read. I shall write you tomorrow. don't let the heat get you down.

              *Giant Hugs, Cat

              • valene

                though i'm not doing much here anymore i do check in from time to time. it is a good site and i like the poets i've read. i think in general i get burned out from being on sites after awhile. i'm glad you like it. as far as NP goes, feel the same way. haven't officially dropped it but i may as well.

              • 2 more comments

              • FredPeyer

                How I would like to meet your "somber - eyed elf". Your poem transported me into some kind of soothing fairy-tale land.
                Mahalo!

                • Candlewitch

                  hello Fred,

                  keep on looking for your own "somber-eyed elf" I'm sure that there many out there, lol! I'm glad you liked this poem 🙂

                  *hugs, Cat

                  • FredPeyer

                    Actually in Hawaii we don't have "elves", we have "menehune"!

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                  • Goldfinch60

                    These are beautiful senryu.

                    • Candlewitch

                      hello Goldfinch,

                      thank you for reading and commenting!

                      *hugs, Cat

                    • Renzi

                      You got the flow.. what a beautiful flow 💓

                      • Candlewitch

                        thank you Renzi!!! have a great day!!!

                        *hugs, Cat



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