I would like to be,
a rhythm to make you dance,
the meaning an your life chance,
Your first and your last instance.
I would like to be,
A smile for your morning scene,
The fuel for your well beginning
The time that can us convene.
I would like to be,
The dream that stays on your mind,
The enchantress to get you all kind,
The best you can ever find.
And I would like to be,
The secret that you carry in your heart,
the feelings to make you start
The space that keep us apart.
And after all, I know!
What seems and I can confirm,
it is you that I most cherish,
Still I'm being so selfish.
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Malu (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: July 7th, 2017 20:23
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"The secret that you carry in your heart" hmmm - I'd shout YOU from the rooftops were you mine! To air your desires like you state is surely and invitation for someone to respond to with equal love. What's selfish about an invitation like that? Wow, what a generous offer!
Well my friend, love bothers too. Too much love if not well administrated can suffocate and tear apart a relationship. But, oh yes! Mad love is good too.
Any love is good love but needy love can be testy. Love and harmony is the lasting condition though i rekkon. i.e. both partners see the other putting in and getting out a pleasing amount of care and attention.
Thanks for you lovely opinion. What I do on any relationship is test the give and take. Somedays people need space and some, they need attention. One should sense when is the time to give more or less. And one need to be self assured enough to feel good sharing the moment or to use the moment to be by yourself.
Where have you been all my life xxx
Hahaha! Just giving my life and love like you did too. I think I'm refined enough to understand that everyone has a world of them self and also that I'm not the center of anyone attention. And as given, as getting. I have a partner and right now he is giving me the time to be writing on this site. He is assured enough to know that love needs enough space to feel free. I love him for that. Thank you for your comments and interaction.
What a beautiful declaration of love. We love and we would like to be loved in return. If that is selfishness, so be it. Love your poem as usual Malu!
Thanks love. I believe we all long for love but are we prepared to receive so much love? Would we not be overwhelmed and suffocated?
too much love will kill you in the circumstance of it happening. as humans we have compulsive emotions that spiral out of control and all sorts of things can go wrong or suffer when we feel we are not being loved enough, nit just by your partner but family and friends. you open up and tell the world your love is on offer. oh how us men would take the offer up in an instant. your writing shows in the expressions in your poetry who you are and more so, what you want and there is nothing wrong with that. selfish? we can all beg to differ so just take it on the chin if selfish in the right degree is a fine thing.
malubotelho
July 7th, 2017 21:25
Kevin, by the time passes one learn so much. I've learned a lot. Even the most truly love can get to scare people. They think why that person loves me so much. Well, no me. I give myself and the moment I have with any body even if with a child I'm really there. But I understand that it can be scary sometimes. Thanks for your comment.
Kevin, by the time passes one learn so much. I've learned a lot. Even the most truly love can get to scare people. They think why that person loves me so much. Well, no me. I give myself and the moment I have with any body even if with a child I'm really there. But I understand that it can be scary sometimes. Thanks for your comment.
best poem I've read in a long time. so full of meaning. I think it will touch many people.
Thanks Pauly, I appreciate your attention and support.
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