To sensitive is the opinion
From others I can hear
I'm now flipping this coin over
Not sensitive enough I will repeat
Sticks and stones will break my bones
But words can live on forever
Get thicker skin is the opinion
From others I can hear
For this will help you toughen up
Then go forward to repeat the cycle
Flip side of this is soft and gentle
Be strong yet Wavey ready to be merciful
Join the real world, that's not how things work. Is the opinion I can hear
You must conform and do as the rest do, just keep your head down then you'll get through.
No change can happen unless you follow the rules, permission must be given to live or move
Now I'm not sure how to flip this
I'll just say my opinion as I see it
What is real when we only hear and see a small percentage of it. Things are forever changing on how "IT" works, look at history.
Rules upon rules when will it end, if I'm not using force to get what I need, then no other rules need to be. I should be free to settle and move as I please
For this is the world I'm trying to create, while listening to others as they compose theirs in the same time and space.
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Very well written...I like that its something truly DIFFERENT
The feed back is much appreciated good sir
Rule-shifting and being our real selves is the way to freedom - well said Dan.
Thank you very much for understanding me
Dan my mate. You've given me a headache. I've read this five times.
But i know you're right to question what is real.
That's good your reality is shifting, roll with it my man. Come join me in my wonderland!
Or we could just be talking about the way I write too
This indeed is interesting. When you said you had a new work ready, I wasn't expecting this. You're right. There's too many laws. Too many rules. They just keep overlapping with each other. It's ridiculous. Good message sir. Keep up the work!
Thank you, yes this is the one I had just finished writing. I've got a couple more I finished last night but I'm still trying to slow my brain down so decoding can be written. Sadly my heart wants to write something else first, it been one those days.
Ha, now you made me think of a piece I did called emotions, my second upload. Thanks for reminding me where I\'ve come from as that was a dark place back then. Thank you friend
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Dan, great poem, love the "Rules upon rules" part.
Here is something that proves your point in a way people can understand:
USA Federal Tax Code in 2016:
Total 74,608 pages long
187 times longer than it was a century ago
It was 400 pages in 1913
I rest my case!
Thanks, fine example. This was a hard part to not go off on one as tbh I've been through the care system and have a lot to say on how much people care about paperwork and rules more than the job it self. Then there are counsellors or doctors, better stop or I'll not stop.
Thanks for the comment
Hi Dan! I just picked this poem to read of yours because the title caught my attention! I love the message of your poem. I think my favorite line was, "I should be free to settle and move as I please." I love how you incorporated empathy into it with feeling too much, overloaded with rules and information. I can definitely relate to that since, I am an extremely sensitive person!!!😬😬😬 Anyways, I loved your poem and keep writing! -A
Thank you soooo much for a wonderful comment. I've been told must of my life I should try not to be quite so much me, until my kids came along and loved every bit of me. See now I've made my eyes water lol, this is a gift I never knew. Although I struggle with writing, spelling or grammar ect, writing helps me be me.
Never not be you! Ever! Don't conform I don't! Love me or leave me!!! 😘
Well written and expressed
Big cheers buddy 😉
Welcome
sounds about right Poetic Dan, and if you are trying to create a world then make sure you do it with an unorthodox type of style which no one has ever heard of or seen before. create with the poetry available and make you words attractive, beautiful and eye catching. good luck my friend.
Perfectly said my friend ill keep pushing those boundaries.
Thank you so much for reading and help inspiring
that's what we should all learn to do, but don't inspire the negative, use your positive thoughts to create something that people will fall in love with. you#re a bright poet so use those skills to show to the world. it's great fun and brilliant if you get it right. it may even richen your entire life up with things you never knew even existed. that's the stuff I reach out for. something new opening up the minds of greater poets than yourself to make way for the up and coming. it's a great journey to be on so go rock it dude.
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