Wishes: Denied

ElenaGrace

Pennies drowning in rattled fountain water

Eyes chasing dandelion seeds dragged by the wind

Bundled figures watching stars drop from the sky

And a girl who's learned that no amount of wishing

Makes dreams come true

  • Author: ElenaGrace (Offline Offline)
  • Published: July 14th, 2017 22:08
  • Comment from author about the poem: Requesting any criticism you have
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Frank Prem

    A nice short Elena. I like this much.

  • Heather T

    You've penned this sorrow beautifully.

  • Nicholas Browning

    Short but true. Wishes don't get acknowledged by anything other than one's own actions. Criticism? Hmm. Punctuation is a great way to add a punch in a line. Try working with it if you want, but if not that's perfectly fine! Leaving it a little bare adds plenty of room for us using our imagination, which is a very good thing. Happy writing!

    • Poetic Dan

      Well said, you truly know how to help if you struggle with grammar like I do.

    • burning-embers

      Cute! My grandmother used to say "if wishes were horses, then beggars would ride." Nice mental picture created.



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