Oops

ElenaGrace

theres one reason I'm alive

so I don't make loved ones sad

but one day I'll be selfish

oops my hand slipped, my bad

  • Author: ElenaGrace (Offline Offline)
  • Published: July 16th, 2017 10:51
  • Comment from author about the poem: This is a rough draft and since right now the language is pretty simple I'm wondering if I should change the poem so there's less basic words. Please tell me what you think, criticism requested.
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Domi

    Its very well written and I think its just fine the way it is. I pictured what you were writing and it leaves my mind to think. Were you trying to make a specific point or idea to why this is a rough draft?

  • onepauly

    keep writing that's the only way you are going to find out.

  • burning-embers

    I think its great, love the humour!



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