In this game of life there are only those who live, and those who have lived.
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poetboy123 (
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Erm, correct me if i'm wrong but those who HAVE lived are no longer in the game of life. The past tense of live equates to 'died'.
I was thinking about that, but then doesn't "had" have the same meaning that would apply to this situation? I just stuck with it hoping people would interpret it.
Actually, nevermind thanks for this comment just realized how to fix it. Still kinda doesn't work though, huh.
Now you've altered it and its a whole different ballgame. The original was much better. And just cos i made that literal observation, it doesn't have to mean your original was invalid my friend. My interpretation was in MY head not yours. I'm trying to give you faith and confidence in your work here.
Haha, sorry I misinterpreted that.
Will said, funny that in my head I flipped it to have died anyway.
Then I thought but memories live on, I've been talking with a friend to do a talk on the subject of this game called life!
Well done and thanks for the nudge to say so it 😉
your the boss
Thank you very much!
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