Candlewitch

Aspirations

 

Aspirations:

by: c.m. mattison

 

hope

transparent and thin

like

leaves too long in the wind

oh

confident desire

which

once sprang eternal (never to expire)

now

with gnarled joints

slowly

crawls

to it's knees

 

Failed Aspirations:

 

hope

transparent and thin

like

leaves too long in the wind

oh

confident desire

which

once sprang eternal (ever to expire)

now

with gnarled joints

slowly

falls

to it's knees

Comments8

  • Hood.

    Sis,

    you clever little minx!

    This is exquisite!

    Love the mirrored reflection of the two!

    Had this included blood it would have felt like an eddy styled poem.

    Richly penned from the unique mind of the witch of candles.

    HS

    • Candlewitch

      hey Bro,

      thanks for reading and appreciating the "reflection" LOL... "styxian"? I'm flattered ;)

      *hugs, Sis

    • malubotelho

      Very reflective piece as you mirrored in comparison. Thanks for sharing.

      • Candlewitch

        thank you, malu!

        *hugs, Cat

      • Michael Edwards

        Confident desire which once sprang eternal - superb bit of writing in a great write.

        • Candlewitch

          dear Michael,

          thanks for noticing :)

          *hugs, Cat

        • Diamond

          Clever, very clever and reading this is food for thought. Liked it very much.

          • Candlewitch

            thank you Diamond! I'm glad it made you think!

            *hugs, Cat

          • FredPeyer

            Cat, I know aspiration stands for hope or ambition, but it also means drawing breath. This is what I had to do when reading it! Great Poem!

            • Candlewitch

              dear Fred,

              thank you for that information, I had forgotten! and I am so glad that you liked it!

              *hugs, Cat

            • onepauly

              could this be father time?

              • Candlewitch

                time changes everything, doesn't it, pauly?

                *hugs, Cat

                • onepauly

                  its a great healer.

                • valene

                  ah yes aspirations....hope springs eternal...i have to believe in hope....so i have to try to ignore the idea that it'll expire...LOL!
                  having said that...i think this is really well written... the mirror image you've created makes this an even more thought provoking write! when i first read it i thought of your endings as being 'eddy styx like' but in a more controlled way. him not invoking his usual anger. as for me, i'm still holding on the positive side of the 'hope' definition of 'aspirations,' so although i find the endings to be perfect for what you're expressing...i'm gonna not take them to heart...LOL! :)
                  really good job c.m. mattison!

                  • Candlewitch

                    thank you val! btw...I wrote you another "ghost story" you should have it when you fire up your computer tonight! happy reading!!!

                    *hugs, Cat

                    • valene

                      :)

                    • Santita

                      I love this!

                      • Candlewitch

                        thank you so very much :)

                        *hugs, Cat



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