Candlewitch

Aspirations

 

Aspirations:

by: c.m. mattison

 

hope

transparent and thin

like

leaves too long in the wind

oh

confident desire

which

once sprang eternal (never to expire)

now

with gnarled joints

slowly

crawls

to it's knees

 

Failed Aspirations:

 

hope

transparent and thin

like

leaves too long in the wind

oh

confident desire

which

once sprang eternal (ever to expire)

now

with gnarled joints

slowly

falls

to it's knees

Comments8

  • Hood

    Sis,

    you clever little minx!

    This is exquisite!

    Love the mirrored reflection of the two!

    Had this included blood it would have felt like an eddy styled poem.

    Richly penned from the unique mind of the witch of candles.

    HS

    • Candlewitch

      hey Bro,

      thanks for reading and appreciating the "reflection" LOL... "styxian"? I'm flattered ;)

      *hugs, Sis

    • Damaged Soul/Kindred Spirit

      Only you could put this so wonderfully to verse the interweaving of reflection. With an inevitable end. Absolutely stunning!

      • Candlewitch

        thank you, DS/KS,

        somehow, I just knew that you would understand.

        *hugs, Cat

        • Damaged Soul/Kindred Spirit

          You are too kind to this ol saddlebum

        • malubotelho

          Very reflective piece as you mirrored in comparison. Thanks for sharing.

          • Candlewitch

            thank you, malu!

            *hugs, Cat

          • Michael Edwards

            Confident desire which once sprang eternal - superb bit of writing in a great write.

            • Candlewitch

              dear Michael,

              thanks for noticing :)

              *hugs, Cat

            • Diamond

              Clever, very clever and reading this is food for thought. Liked it very much.

              • Candlewitch

                thank you Diamond! I'm glad it made you think!

                *hugs, Cat

              • FredPeyer

                Cat, I know aspiration stands for hope or ambition, but it also means drawing breath. This is what I had to do when reading it! Great Poem!

                • Candlewitch

                  dear Fred,

                  thank you for that information, I had forgotten! and I am so glad that you liked it!

                  *hugs, Cat

                • onepauly

                  could this be father time?

                  • Candlewitch

                    time changes everything, doesn't it, pauly?

                    *hugs, Cat

                    • onepauly

                      its a great healer.

                    • valene

                      ah yes aspirations....hope springs eternal...i have to believe in hope....so i have to try to ignore the idea that it'll expire...LOL!
                      having said that...i think this is really well written... the mirror image you've created makes this an even more thought provoking write! when i first read it i thought of your endings as being 'eddy styx like' but in a more controlled way. him not invoking his usual anger. as for me, i'm still holding on the positive side of the 'hope' definition of 'aspirations,' so although i find the endings to be perfect for what you're expressing...i'm gonna not take them to heart...LOL! :)
                      really good job c.m. mattison!

                      • Candlewitch

                        thank you val! btw...I wrote you another "ghost story" you should have it when you fire up your computer tonight! happy reading!!!

                        *hugs, Cat

                        • valene

                          :)



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