Aspirations:
by: c.m. mattison
hope
transparent and thin
like
leaves too long in the wind
oh
confident desire
which
once sprang eternal (never to expire)
now
with gnarled joints
slowly
crawls
to it's knees
Failed Aspirations:
hope
transparent and thin
like
leaves too long in the wind
oh
confident desire
which
once sprang eternal (ever to expire)
now
with gnarled joints
slowly
falls
to it's knees
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Sis,
you clever little minx!
This is exquisite!
Love the mirrored reflection of the two!
Had this included blood it would have felt like an eddy styled poem.
Richly penned from the unique mind of the witch of candles.
HS
hey Bro,
thanks for reading and appreciating the "reflection" LOL... "styxian"? I'm flattered
*hugs, Sis
Only you could put this so wonderfully to verse the interweaving of reflection. With an inevitable end. Absolutely stunning!
thank you, DS/KS,
somehow, I just knew that you would understand.
*hugs, Cat
You are too kind to this ol saddlebum
Very reflective piece as you mirrored in comparison. Thanks for sharing.
thank you, malu!
*hugs, Cat
Confident desire which once sprang eternal - superb bit of writing in a great write.
dear Michael,
thanks for noticing
*hugs, Cat
Clever, very clever and reading this is food for thought. Liked it very much.
thank you Diamond! I'm glad it made you think!
*hugs, Cat
Cat, I know aspiration stands for hope or ambition, but it also means drawing breath. This is what I had to do when reading it! Great Poem!
dear Fred,
thank you for that information, I had forgotten! and I am so glad that you liked it!
*hugs, Cat
could this be father time?
time changes everything, doesn't it, pauly?
*hugs, Cat
its a great healer.
ah yes aspirations....hope springs eternal...i have to believe in hope....so i have to try to ignore the idea that it'll expire...LOL!
having said that...i think this is really well written... the mirror image you've created makes this an even more thought provoking write! when i first read it i thought of your endings as being 'eddy styx like' but in a more controlled way. him not invoking his usual anger. as for me, i'm still holding on the positive side of the 'hope' definition of 'aspirations,' so although i find the endings to be perfect for what you're expressing...i'm gonna not take them to heart...LOL!
really good job c.m. mattison!
thank you val! btw...I wrote you another "ghost story" you should have it when you fire up your computer tonight! happy reading!!!
*hugs, Cat
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