I'm just jotting down notes off the top of my head,
Shooting off my thoughts like a gun full of lead.
No revision or proof reading going on here,
If you look for perfection, look elsewhere, my dear!
Why is everyone so concerned with me? Am I some kind of roll model failing society? You're wasting your breath if you want me to cut my hair, and I can't help but laugh at the scorn in your stare. See, I have my opinions like everyone else, but I keep them reserved unless I know they will help.
No, I don't live like you, nor would I like to! You don't like what I do, just take a walk, fool! Ive got no time to waste on another old tool! Sit back on your stool, let me take you to school where the knowledge is power, and I have it all!
First of all, Muslim doesn't mean terrorist! You can tell me that Islam Is evil? ! Thats unbelievable! This line of thought is what drives people to hate chistians. If there wasn't conflict in religion, thered be no conflict in our regions! Maybe we can learn to love one another, since we're trapped on the same rock, but most will still fight in flocks, and all for some "god".
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Author:
Drewseph (Pseudonym) (
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Great bit of off the cuff jotting down notes. Except why leave the 'first of all' comment to line twelve out of sixteen? Surely 'first of all' denotes it should be first? Make your points loud and bold and never forget - less is more!
Yeah, you have a good point there, if I had revised this that's probably The first change id make. Thanks for the feedback, man!
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