Acid falls with her tears,
I've always wondered why.
Knowing her all these years,
until now to see her cry.
With acid burning through her face,
she shows no sign of pain.
She moves along with such grace
among the acid rain.
Acid falls with her tears,
I've always wondered why.
Knowing her all these years,
until now to see her cry.
With acid burning through her face,
she shows no sign of pain.
She moves along with such grace
among the acid rain.
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I feel sympathy for whom the poem is about, though sad, it is written delicately and I like the contrast in the language. Soft vs hard...acid/rain, pain/grace
Thank you! I'm glad the poem got a clear tone across and I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
I think the way santita sums this up is just right. Lot of us carry pains around making the best of life. Really nice writing. Please comment on my stuff.
Alex, this is really well written. I do like the choice of 'acid rain' to represent pain and maybe disaster. That is very imaginative and original. And to bring 'grace' into it is a stroke of genius. It shows the inner strength to overcome that pain.
Great poem!
Thank you so much! This also turned out to be a favorite of mine, I don't usually rhyme but I had fun with this one!
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