Stranger in the Dark

roseintime18

Looking out from my window pane,

I see the street, and the trees.

I can just hear the rain.

In the distance a man fell to his knees.

Was it pain that he was feeling?

I could not help but wonder

Is this man actually kneeling

Praying for the sound of thunder?

The man got up and started walking

Close towards the dark abyss.

Could I hear someone talking?

Or was that just a hiss?

He ventured into the dark alone,

Still his name is unknown.

 

  • Author: roseintime18 (Offline Offline)
  • Published: September 8th, 2017 21:07
  • Comment from author about the poem: Just started writing again after four years.. Please give constructive criticism feedback. Tell me if you like it.
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Gary Edward Geraci

    I'm all for praying people...I count fourteen lines, the traditional number of lines for a sonnet. Your rhyme scheme (ababcdcdefefgg) is new to me but I'm new to poetry. I don't believe in a rating system - maybe in a classroom - but not here. I used it just once to gently give a guy a taste of his own medicine (call it a fraternal correction if you will). This one seems to come from your heart and is part of getting your voice back. Welcome back.

    • roseintime18

      Thank you, I am trying to get my voice back. I haven't wrote poetry in three years. Agree, rating system is not a good choice, so I deleted it.

    • Seek

      Nice sonnet. Leaves me wondering about this mysterious person. Thanks for sharing!



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