Somewhere out there
Lies thy elsewhere
For thy beauty to glare
Thy miracles to share
Nowhere else but there
A universe lays bare
For you to ensnare
Seek for thy gem to flare
Somewhere in between
A love for you to preen
Splendor for a life unseen
Save for eyes ever green
Hearts from hate to wean
Majesties for you to glean
Completing the soul’s cuisine
Crave no more, precious queen
©Alwi Shatry, September 14, 2017
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Author:
Seek (
Offline) - Published: September 15th, 2017 07:22
- Comment from author about the poem: The seed for this write came from a comment on my poem "The Friendly Tyrant" by Outback. I am deeply grateful to him for sharing for his insights.
- Category: Reflection
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Comments4
Some outstanding rhyming in this exciting verse - - I love the final stanza with its "soul's cuisine". A great read Seek.
Thank you Fay. Very nice of you to read and comment.
Awesome rhyming, great choice of words. I do like it, Seek!
I am flattered FredP. Thank you.
Way to go seek cool poem 😎
Thanks for commenting.
Way over my head is this. I'm still at jack and jill went up the hill level.
Your modesty is remarkable. After reading "Kat and Santita" and "Tower", I am much closer to the J&J level, I must admit. You write some really marvelous stuff. Had to slow down and reread to get a fuller understanding of your very accomplished work. I say that with all sincerity. I am honored by your visit.
In all sincerity i feel the other way sir. You use of metaphor is something beyond me. Same applies to many poets on here, i am no student of literature just a lay poet. I admire the use of metaphor but it goes way over my head. We are two differing styles i guess. Thank you for your kind compliment sir.
Your response if further affirmation of your humbleness. But rather than trying to engage you as to who is the "lesser" poet between us --- lol, we are at least level in neither one being a student of literature. I just checked my poetry folder in which my very first poem ever was written on January 29 of this year. Since then writing poems --- for whatever that's worth, has been very gratifying as a retirement activity. Very glad I took it up. Now back to you DA, if I really had your talent for writing, I would be very busy looking for a publisher for my work. Again, I state this with all sincerity. I could say this for other members of this site, but the subject never came up for discussion. By and large, you are absolutely right about our differing styles. I nonetheless still feel my writing identity is very much in its infancy. A real pleasure communicating with you Sir.
You must let your writing blossom then sir! And this is the place to do it. Plenty of encouragement here and poets trying out new styles and genre. Let your feelings/imagination run free, for if you cant do it here - then where?
Thank you DA. Agreed about the place as I wouldn't change this site for the world. This is my where and my elsewhere, lol.
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