I’m not surprised I feel so down,
When you have people making you feel like a clown.
I try my best to be liked and loved,
But all I can feel is being shoved.
From your life and out your sight,
Is this what you want for us to fight?
It isn’t right and it makes me feel shit,
Because I care about you quite a bit.
You pretend to be this amazing guy,
But you don’t even care and I want to know why.
I gave you my whole entire heart,
Without me knowing you had it from the start.
You make me question the love you had,
Making me reminisce makes me feel mad.
About the emptiness of your words,
Was I just another one of the birds.
You strung me along and knocked me off my feet,
Because babe that ain’t very sweet.
You have affected me in many ways,
Because working you out is like a maze.
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Author:
Chloe Rachel (Pseudonym) (
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This was great. Emotional...
I loved it
Thank you! Glad you liked it!
CR x
Oh, what you have been through?
Love is such a complicated puzzle, hope you figure this maze out soon.
Nice writing.
I'm starting to put things together, hopefully it comes through my upcoming work!
Working out your partners thoughts etc when relationship is going wrong is a nightmare..... Move along.... there are people who will love and respect you in return for the same from you.
Thank you for your words of support and encouragement.
CR x
You bared heart and soul on paper and shared it here. Very raw with emotion, great write. You made us feel, not just read.
Wow, thank you so much for such great feedback! I really appreciate it!
CR x
Better to give someone your all and lose them, than hold back and risk losing someone potentially perfect for you, because of someone who was once a TW@ Better tonhave loved and lost and all that!
Good poem full of emotion and frustration
Thank you! I think my poems are going to be very heartbreak orientated for the foreseeable ha!
What goes in must come out the second you try to think about what you're writing it won't work unless it's (**cheese warning**) from the heart
What goes in must come out the second you try to think about what you're writing it won't work unless it's (**cheese warning**) from the heart
You are very right! I seriously can't stop writing! I promise it won't all be doom and gloom though!
Chloe, no matter how hard it seems when a love breaks, remember, when one door closes, another one opens up. It would be nice if we knew right from the start how things will be, but unfortunately that is not the case. But one day you WILL find the right one. I know, I found mine, been married over 40 years and still do hold hands! 🙂
Great poem, great writing, like it!
You're very right. That is just so sweet! Thank you Fred!
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