For my salvation, she appeared
Touring my troubles along the way
Portrayed sheer perfection as she neared
Blue eyes told me things her mouth couldn't say
Relived my darkness, for moments brief
Delivering me peace of mind
No risk, rewards no relief
As she erased all that was unkind,
With her enchanted hand atop my shoulder
She shed my guilt like old skin
Believing her power of love controlled her
Instilling a light within me to start again.
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I don't know if this, highlighting the first, then second letter, etc, is more difficult that an acrostic where the first letter of each line makes up the acrostic?! A fine write S.
I thought an Acrostic could go either way, as long as it consecutively and consistently spelled out something. I'm not sure. Y'all have been writing poetry long before me. Thank you for the compliment though.
I'm no expert on acrostics. Looks more difficult to do the way you've done this. Have to allocate certain words, I suppose. Line 1, letter 1; line 2, letter 2; etc.
It was a bit difficult. I appreciate the acknowledgement, thank you.
Very nicely written! She is a lucky girl! But an acrostic usually starts with the first letter of every line---helpful criticism I hope!!! 🙂
Very helpful guys. Thank you. I had just read Edgar Allan Poe's "A Valentine." That's sort of the style I was going for. However, I will try the other as well. Thank you for your kindness and time you took to read.
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