Crisis In Oz by: eddy styx

"Crisis in Oz"

I watched him draw her in
With his easy ways
His trap closed around her
Tightly he clasped her inexperience
To his hungry chest
As greedily he sucked
The youth from her being
For a brief whisper
The middle age which ate upon his mind
Was stilled into silence
By her sacrifice
Better to have snuffed her light
Burning brightly and quick
Than to have stolen her pearl...


  • HChristian74

    Excellent! The imagery in this write is hauntingly perfect!


    • Candlewitch

      hello, my new friend! thank you for everything 🙂

      ever, eddy
      *hugs, Cat

    • Fay Slimm.

      The wizard of darkness strikes again here with a tale of seduction and demand for sacrifice - summed up in a final wry statement the fate of a poor inexperienced maid your pen scribed such a clever last line Cat - a great piece of prose.

      • Candlewitch

        hello Fay,

        I thank you most sincerely!

        ever, eddy

      • WL Schuett

        Very dark yet somehow very beautiful....

        • Candlewitch

          dear WL,

          thank you for your thoughtful response!

          ever, eddy

        • Michael Edwards

          Wowch - strong stuff - great write Cat

          • Candlewitch

            thank you Michael!

            ever, eddy

          • Goldfinch60

            Super write eddy, stealing someones ageing is great idea.

            • Candlewitch

              thank you friend Goldfinch 🙂

              ever, eddy

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