Jacob Bennett

Ordinary

I have no stories

nothing to be said

I have no home

I am dead

 

all I have is myself

alone, wary

all I am

is Ordinary

 

I have no ideas

nothing to own

I have no emotion

I am stone

 

all I have is myself

alone, wary

all I am

is Ordinary

 

I have no desires

nothing to want

I have no heart

I am gaunt

 

all I have is myself

everyday

I am ordinary

nothing to say

Comments2

  • orchidee

    That's OK, plenty of folk are ordinary. You're not dead because of it!

    • Jacob Bennett

      I was writing from the view point of my younger self who was lost. I am happy to say that I have been found!

    • poelove

      heyJacob, me again...your younger self was very depressing haha. I'm reading this and thinking it is missing metaphor-for example you say I am stone perhaps the next verse could elaborate (what kind of stone?) you could be your younger self as a headstone on a grave looking out upon the visitors at a cemetary and relateing to your experience of being just like the other ordinary stones...this works well because in the first verse you imagine you are dead...just a thought..Metaphors are one of themajor keys to poetry. Check out some of my poetry and tell me what you think I only have a few poems so far but I would like your youthful input...peace



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