I can't breathe
My chest pounds like a beating drum
My hands are numb
I'm going numb
I can't breathe
So much fear of growing old
Don't want to be cold
Dead and cold
I can't breathe
What's that ringing in my ear
Do you hear
Does anybody ever fucking hear
I can't breathe
The future is all I can see
I just want to be
Why can't I just be
I can't breathe
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Author:
Naeners (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I've been in a almost constant state of panic lately, and I'm working on it, but right now my only relief is poetry and I'm so thankful for it. Please tell me what you think. Constructive criticism is always welcomed.
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Comments1
hello .. this is very expressive, i lke the reference to your chest beating like a drum , it gives strength to those words and it makes it sound as if your heart beat is too strong and too loud. it sounds full of panic which i guess is what you are trying to express... this really tells of a girl who is struggling to be in the moment , where she is , instead all she is doing is looking ahead with negative bad thoughts and panicking i think you wrote this very well , panic is not nice and i think to be honest with you everybody has this fear , of getting old etc ..
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