Everything feels
Empty now
In my heart
It's empty now
And in my mind
I'm empty now
Every smile
Is empty now
Just look at me
So empty now
Because this world
Feels empty now
So empty now
Too empty now
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Author:
Naeners (
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emptiness is not nice .. i like your repetition of the word empty and i like the flow to this piece, take a look at my poem '' the empty well '' its a feeling im used to
despite it being around '' emptiness '' it has a nice flow and a nice beat to this , when i read it along it sounds kind of a bit song like . .unless this is just how i am reading it .. i think , maybe if you add a few extra lines or added words or more description to how your heart feels,but its short and sweet and you convery how empty yuo feel
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