Maxine Smith

What If?!

 

 

What if we lost our sight tonight 

We’d hear life’s divine harmony 

We could wake up and start to fight 

Embracing the uncertainty 

 

What if we lost our way to hear

We’d look so pure at life’s beauty 

Open to see there is no fear 

Be unafraid it’s our duty

 

What if we lost our speech tonight 

We learn to express more deeply 

Honest gestures open us bright 

Souls now intertwine so easy 

 

Look for the light in every dark, 

Every loss shows us a new start.

 

 

 

 

 

Comments10

  • stevievize

    Love the message here it tells the message to appreciate everything in life, if we lose something we gain more somewhere else. Like new beginnings after a tragedy or upset in life. Good read.

    • Maxine Smith

      Thank you Miss Stevie-Jayne 😀

    • orchidee

      A fine write Maxine.

      • Maxine Smith

        Thank you, much appreciated Orchidee.

      • Fay Slimm.

        A sound delivery of gaining by comparison appreciation of every sense with a couplet-finalé for readers to note and remember - well done - first class writing Maxine.

        • Maxine Smith

          Thank you so much Fay, really trying to develop my writing. Never have a problem expressing myself but now I’m trying to refine it to good writing.
          So thank you for your lovely review.

        • RiverJordan

          What if...poetry didn't exist?..enjoyed this

          • Maxine Smith

            Thank you, much appreciated 😀

          • BRIAN & ANGELA

            THANKS MAXINE ~ This is beautiful ! Technically it is a LINK POEM ! Each of the three quatrains starts with the title WHAT IF ? (In poetry repetition always reinforces the message !) The second LINK is that Sight ~ Hearing ~ Speech are all Senses (a GOOD poem should have a single theme expressed in the Title !) The third link is an examination of the consequences of LOOSING on of you senses ! This poem is in fact a 4 4 4 2 Sonnet and in Sonnet form the final doublet is always a SUMMATION !

            Look for the light in every dark
            Every loss shows us a new start !

            In both Structure & Subject this elegant
            Poem ~ is a perfect LINK SONNET ~ and
            each Quatrain has good meter (flow) and a
            consistent "rhyme pattern" abab cdcd and
            efef (some are half-rhymes which is GOOD !)
            You have a POETIC heart ~ mind and soul !

            Well done ~ Love all your Poems
            Your MPS Friend ~ BRIAN

            • Maxine Smith

              Thank you Brian, for your awsome, informative review. Appreciated always. Really happy you like.

            • lasergraph

              Great write, when we lose one sense the others enhance to make up for it.

              • Maxine Smith

                Exactly, thank you for taking the time to have a read and review.

              • Michael Edwards

                Wow - you've received some great comments - all of them so well deserved.

                • Maxine Smith

                  Thank you Michael, appreciate that.

                • AllTheRandomThings

                  This.Is.So.Insightful.❤️

                • Goldfinch60

                  "What if...?" the deepest of all questions. The theory of infinitesimal parallel Universes would be able to answer that question.
                  Good write.

                  • Maxine Smith

                    Thank you for sharing Gold.

                  • FineB

                    Thank you Maxine.

                    What a beautiful thought provoking poem.

                    Sometimes we are not always grateful for what the good Lord has given us.

                    We are our own divine masterpiece and we all need to treasure ourselves.

                    Keep writing
                    FineB

                    • Maxine Smith

                      Thank you so much for your lovely review. A write to inspire the appreciation of life, even if something is missing, we can even more so hold on to what’s really there.



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