Maxine Smith

What’s Real Love?! BRIAN & MAX Collaboration

Kill me slowly, unable to be me 

Suffocate, can’t breathe, with your energy 

No friends, no life, feeling like your doormat 

Long to be consoled, alone where I’m sat 

 

I love my wife and I do my best

But I like to go for a drink with my crowd

She seems a loner, I laugh with the rest

Is she bored, unsociable, proud ? 

 

My voice fading away in the background 

Im unheard, so I lay in silent sound 

Together, without that loving embrace 

We turn our back in bed, we do not face

 

I love a laugh and a Beer and a Chaser

But she's silent in bed and nursing her sorrow

I'd like a cuddle but she's moody, can't face her

Perhaps she will "Light up my Fire" tomorrow ?

 

I see your eyes light, when lust walks on by 

I follow your gaze, to them you will smile 

Only notice me, when I lose some weight 

Is this my real love? Is this my real fate ?

 

Have we grown old, has our love grown cold ?

Why does our Young Neighbour shed light from above ?

But tonight something happened, my member was  BOLD !

We made love, hand in glove, MY REAL LOVE ! ! ! 

Comments11

  • stevievize

    Very good poem shows the real struggles of marriage and love well done you two

    • Maxine Smith

      Thank you Stevie, words ring true with our past.

      • stevievize

        Absolutely too much so

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      • 🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷😸

        This is interesting and I'm sure married couples could relate to the challenges. Awesome in composition and rhyming, like a hubby's and wife's point of view after years together. I believe real love is long lasting yeh and faithful. Kudos.

        • Maxine Smith

          Thanks so much Zanab, I love your optimistic perspective. Real love should last through everything and always remain faithful no matter how hard it gets.

          • BRIAN & ANGELA

            Thanks ZANAB ~ Love should grow with the years but there must be give & take and understanding ! Verse 6 shows me that REAL LOVE is always there it just needs to activated and consummated ! Thanks for your comment ~ BRIAN

          • Lorna

            Introverts and extroverts together at last...........

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          • Nicholas Browning

            Love in general can seem this way. People are strange creatures, all a part of some circus anyhow. Good work both of you.

            • Maxine Smith

              Thank you Nicholas.
              I think love is dealing with all the negativity and still pushing forward to better each other. Can be easy to fall into bad habits, it’s important to remember each other and why you fell in the first place.

              • BRIAN & ANGELA

                Thanks NB ~ A CIRCUS is a good analogy and I love CIRCUSES ~ Large & Small ~ BUT ~ for a Trapeze Act to survive ~ there must be REAL LOVE ~ OK ~ BRIAN Falling in the SAFETY NET is much more Dangerous and Damaging than it looks and can spell the end of a Promising Duo !

              • LAWLESS

                As my friend told me once: "May all your ups and downs be between the sheets!"

                Nice job the two of yous.

                • Maxine Smith

                  Haha I like that. Thanks Lawless.

                  • BRIAN & ANGELA

                    Thanks LAWLESS ~ I notice with my Friends that when they cease to "couple" and "cuddle" the romance has gone out of their Marriage (I'm referring to the under 50's here !) and it can lead to separation & divorce ~ others accept it as the norm and continue in a "loveless marriage" ! I liked the wording of your riposte ! Yours BRIAN

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                  • orchidee

                    Oohh, please don't explain any hidden meaning to 'hand in glove' - I feel a swoon coming on! heehee.

                    • Maxine Smith

                      Haha I think the hidden meaning is not so hidden ....

                      • orchidee

                        Oh no! Swoon! hehe. Well, you have marked it 18+. I'm a 'watchdog', so I say, in case any poems are not marked 18+ and should be. Of course, I have to read them all, even 18+ ones. That's my excuse. I'm a dark horse. lol.

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                      • Christina8

                        This is an excellent collaboration and shows the ups and downs of different personalities in marriages. That is why I have written about love so much--we are so compatible. But kudos to the rhyming and the real life situations. Great job to the two of you!!

                        • Maxine Smith

                          Aw that’s lovely Christina, must be amazing to find that one who sees you as their equal. To be able to continue that spark eternally throughout their relationship, with support and respect, this is how I see to be compatible, congrats 😊
                          Thank you for your kind words.

                          • Christina8

                            It is amazing and I thank you for your congrats! You are welcome for the kind words---they were well earned!

                          • ron parrish aka wordman

                            i`m sure words ring true in more places than you think

                          • E-Poems

                            such a good write! Always enjoy reading your work maxine and its a brilliant collaboration!

                            ~E

                            • Maxine Smith

                              Thank you so much Hun and I Yours.

                            • Ewee_Eyes

                              Interesting, very realistic. I did not see that end coming lol

                              • Maxine Smith

                                Ah so pleased you found it lol Yes a wonderful thing about collaborations you really don’t always see what’s coming yourself lol Brian brilliantly wrapped this one up.

                              • Goldfinch60

                                These words show how difficult marriage can be but maybe I am just very lucky, there has never been any real conflict in my marriage and in our 37 years of married life we have NEVER had a row.

                                • Maxine Smith

                                  That is wonderful Gold. For some true love does prevail.



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