Silence cries
The mornings night
Grounded sky’s
Darkness in glorious light
Fall as we rise
Live after we die
Eyes close to see
In awakened sleep
Surreal so real
Broken as we heal
Leap high to go under
Running still to quiet thunder
Raindrops so dry
Truth in the lies
Everything’s nothing makes sense
Body lay so soft and tense
Distressing lullabies
Soothing in silence we cry
The mornings night it seems
In my bitter sweet dreams
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Author:
Miss M S Smith (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Sometimes when I sleep, it feels so real, even when the impossible applies I believe im really there. Just a little write about the crazy in my dreams.
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Surreal so real - I wish I'd written that - a bit of magic in a super piece of writing.
Thank you Michael, such wonderful words, very much appreciated as always.
Love the introduction - there's a haiku in it somewhere.
Good write, dreams can be wonderfully meaningless.
Thanks so much Gold.
Didn't have to translate this one.
Oh brilliant, no idea what happened with the last one.
A fine write Maxine.
Thanks so much Orchidee
GOOD MORNING ~ MAXINE ~ Bitter ~ Sweet is a lovely OXYMORON (contradictory term) and yet it describes so many of life's experiences ~ especially LOVE ~ but also DREAMS as your perfect poem exemplifies ! Love the prelude ~ YES ~ There are no rules in Dreaming !
Love the language in the poem in the poem ~ the structure and the vibrancy of the internal rhyme !
Silence cries ~ Grounded sky's
Fall as we rise ~ Truth in the lies
Surreal so real
Broken as we heal
Raindrops so dry
Soothing in silence we cry
The morning's night it seems
In my bitter sweet dreams !
It is the fragmentation of verse that makes the poem so surreal and perfect to recite ~ I am a performance Poet ~ thanks for sharing your Dreams ! You might like to visit SUMMER HOLIDAY it is very refreshing ! Yours as always ~ Hugs BRIAN @@@@@@@
Thank you so much Brian. So pleased you like it.
A place of no rules where we play out our dreams - - love the sense of fancy in this write Maxine -- very well styled is the title too. Great read.
Thank you so much Fay. Lovely words.
It's said that one sure sign of depression is the need to spend too many daylight hours in bed asleep. Is it any wonder when the worlds you mind can create in dreams is so much nicer than the real world.
I discovered i am a lucid dreamer which doesn't help.
I love to dream, the unlimited, unfiltered beautiful dreams.
It’s the lucid dreams that can completely consume you.
Thanks for the feedback, sending some
Wonderful dreams your way.
Very good write max.... love the subject matter of dreams. And the words used are brilliant well done you 😘
Thank you so much bestie, glad you like ☺️
Lots of brilliant one liners in this Max. Excellent x
Aw thank you ☺️❤️
Fantastic piece! 🙂
Thanks hunny
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