BitterSweetDreams

Maxine Smith

 

Silence cries 

The mornings night 

Grounded sky’s

Darkness in glorious light 

Fall as we rise 

Live after we die 

Eyes close to see

In awakened sleep 

Surreal so real

Broken as we heal 

Leap high to go under 

Running still to quiet thunder 

Raindrops so dry 

Truth in the lies 

Everything’s nothing makes sense 

Body lay so soft and tense 

Distressing lullabies 

Soothing in silence we cry 

The mornings night it seems 

In my bitter sweet dreams 

 

 

 

  • Author: Miss M S Smith (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: May 21st, 2018 00:22
  • Comment from author about the poem: Sometimes when I sleep, it feels so real, even when the impossible applies I believe im really there. Just a little write about the crazy in my dreams.
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 70
  • User favorite of this poem: whisperingquill.

Comments11

  • Michael Edwards

    Surreal so real - I wish I'd written that - a bit of magic in a super piece of writing.

    • Maxine Smith

      Thank you Michael, such wonderful words, very much appreciated as always.

    • Michael Edwards

      Love the introduction - there's a haiku in it somewhere.

    • Goldfinch60

      Good write, dreams can be wonderfully meaningless.

    • Goldfinch60

      Didn't have to translate this one.

      • Maxine Smith

        Oh brilliant, no idea what happened with the last one.

      • orchidee

        A fine write Maxine.

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        GOOD MORNING ~ MAXINE ~ Bitter ~ Sweet is a lovely OXYMORON (contradictory term) and yet it describes so many of life's experiences ~ especially LOVE ~ but also DREAMS as your perfect poem exemplifies ! Love the prelude ~ YES ~ There are no rules in Dreaming !
        Love the language in the poem in the poem ~ the structure and the vibrancy of the internal rhyme !

        Silence cries ~ Grounded sky's
        Fall as we rise ~ Truth in the lies

        Surreal so real
        Broken as we heal

        Raindrops so dry
        Soothing in silence we cry
        The morning's night it seems
        In my bitter sweet dreams !

        It is the fragmentation of verse that makes the poem so surreal and perfect to recite ~ I am a performance Poet ~ thanks for sharing your Dreams ! You might like to visit SUMMER HOLIDAY it is very refreshing ! Yours as always ~ Hugs BRIAN @@@@@@@

        • Maxine Smith

          Thank you so much Brian. So pleased you like it.

        • Fay Slimm.

          A place of no rules where we play out our dreams - - love the sense of fancy in this write Maxine -- very well styled is the title too. Great read.

          • Maxine Smith

            Thank you so much Fay. Lovely words.

          • dusk arising

            It's said that one sure sign of depression is the need to spend too many daylight hours in bed asleep. Is it any wonder when the worlds you mind can create in dreams is so much nicer than the real world.
            I discovered i am a lucid dreamer which doesn't help.

            • Maxine Smith

              I love to dream, the unlimited, unfiltered beautiful dreams.
              It’s the lucid dreams that can completely consume you.
              Thanks for the feedback, sending some
              Wonderful dreams your way.

            • stevievize

              Very good write max.... love the subject matter of dreams. And the words used are brilliant well done you 😘

              • Maxine Smith

                Thank you so much bestie, glad you like ☺️

              • Sam Cork

                Lots of brilliant one liners in this Max. Excellent x

                • Maxine Smith

                  Aw thank you ☺️❤️

                • Crystal Hope

                  Fantastic piece! 🙂



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