Comments received on poems by 15EHilton



Sisters
Frogspoetry said:

VERY NICE TRIBUTE TO YOUR SISTER

June 28th, 2018 21:53

Toy Soldier
Candlewitch said:

hello,

in this poem, the comparison of the toy soldier, once shiny and new, to a young man\'s life, is so deeply profound. then sullied by the ugliness of battle, and the innocence forever lost....very well told, nicely done!

*hugs, Cat


June 9th, 2018 16:30

Toy Soldier
orchidee said:

To try to say a bit more, as well as \'fine/good write, etc, here are a couple of things - not that I am professional!
* Good use of repeat words without over-doing the repetition, of \'toy\', \'gone\', etc.
* A good metaphor of \'toys\', used literally, and then personified as a person.
* Explains how people can use others as toys or \'things\', or as if people are just \'numbers\' or \'labels\'.

June 6th, 2018 01:40

Toy Soldier
Kurt Philip Behm said:

Wonderful! You have captured the two things I always look for—a strong beginning and end.
The way you layer the middle stanzas is masterful.

Thanks for inviting me to read. I\'m glad I did.

Kurt

June 6th, 2018 01:05

Toy Soldier
blank_voice said:

Wow that took a turn, good flow though. Sad story behind it. Beautiful write, sure to pass the exams with that!

June 5th, 2018 17:47

Toy Soldier
orchidee said:

A fine birthday write I see! Best wishes!

June 5th, 2018 12:49