Comments received on poems by That1_13yrold_writer
Call me by your name.
Bellbell_060609 said:
Damn. That was really good. Well done
August 9th, 2023 12:41
Bellbell_060609 said:
Damn. That was really good. Well done
August 9th, 2023 12:41
Without Love,
mvvenkataraman said:
\"My life shall slowly \"WITHER\" away,
This poem for love is so elaborate,
None else can find any new point
As you have included everything,
I truly love this poem as I love loving!
February 2nd, 2023 22:06
mvvenkataraman said:
\"My life shall slowly \"WITHER\" away,
This poem for love is so elaborate,
None else can find any new point
As you have included everything,
I truly love this poem as I love loving!
February 2nd, 2023 22:06
I am a woman.
Rocky Lagou said:
If poetry were a gun, you\'ve just shot a bullet that reverberates to all generations. Amen.
January 13th, 2023 09:13
Rocky Lagou said:
If poetry were a gun, you\'ve just shot a bullet that reverberates to all generations. Amen.
January 13th, 2023 09:13
I am a woman.
L. B. Mek said:
more power to you! sister
such self-empowering affirmations
are the bedrocks of wisdom\'s visionary realisations
I hope you find and seize that freedom you seek
in your personal life..
as write\'s like yours are a bastion
of Maya Angelou\'s torch
and a bridge to all who came before and after her
for all future generations to realise
there is a deeply rooted wrongness in our world
manifested, foremost
in that spineless generalisation
of girls and lady\'s
being attributed worth, mostly
by their aesthetic attributes
or perversely, being resented
for daring to aspire, beyond
societies limitations..
(first came man, then came subjugation
all else in humanity\'s annals
is a repetition
of senseless might, making right)
boys, worshiping their own mother\'s
while belittling their children\'s mothers
at every opportunity...
before
they/we burned witches alive
they/we scalped hope from a lady\'s breath
till all was left were ashen heart\'s bereft of dreams..
but
like all tide\'s of change
modernity\'s winds are rife with Gaia\'s wrath
and although
nothing can make amends
for history\'s millennia of injustice
that we can dream and fathom a future
where, being a lady
equates to being a person
first and foremost
before, anything else is observed
(like it has for every man
privileged
with an existence, devoid
of threat
for merely being, a man)
is a wonderfully hopeful note
to this inherited debacle of atrocious inhumanity
(sing your Truth, loud and proud!)
my words would mean more if I was woman and could relate directly
still, for those cherished ladies in my life I empathise with
and the truth of their cause, I do so laud the power of your words
January 13th, 2023 05:21
L. B. Mek said:
more power to you! sister
such self-empowering affirmations
are the bedrocks of wisdom\'s visionary realisations
I hope you find and seize that freedom you seek
in your personal life..
as write\'s like yours are a bastion
of Maya Angelou\'s torch
and a bridge to all who came before and after her
for all future generations to realise
there is a deeply rooted wrongness in our world
manifested, foremost
in that spineless generalisation
of girls and lady\'s
being attributed worth, mostly
by their aesthetic attributes
or perversely, being resented
for daring to aspire, beyond
societies limitations..
(first came man, then came subjugation
all else in humanity\'s annals
is a repetition
of senseless might, making right)
boys, worshiping their own mother\'s
while belittling their children\'s mothers
at every opportunity...
before
they/we burned witches alive
they/we scalped hope from a lady\'s breath
till all was left were ashen heart\'s bereft of dreams..
but
like all tide\'s of change
modernity\'s winds are rife with Gaia\'s wrath
and although
nothing can make amends
for history\'s millennia of injustice
that we can dream and fathom a future
where, being a lady
equates to being a person
first and foremost
before, anything else is observed
(like it has for every man
privileged
with an existence, devoid
of threat
for merely being, a man)
is a wonderfully hopeful note
to this inherited debacle of atrocious inhumanity
(sing your Truth, loud and proud!)
my words would mean more if I was woman and could relate directly
still, for those cherished ladies in my life I empathise with
and the truth of their cause, I do so laud the power of your words
January 13th, 2023 05:21
She Is Me.
Mara \"Marzipan\" said:
First thing I\'d like to say is I am floored that you have such talent at thirteen, this is amazing work.
Secondly, You made a 35 year old woman cry, because your words brought to the forefront of my mind the shared emotions and issues with looking in the mirror.
I see you, You see you, you\'ll find your equilibrium eventually, just don\'t ever forget that we are our own worst critic.
💕
January 11th, 2023 19:46
Mara \"Marzipan\" said:
First thing I\'d like to say is I am floored that you have such talent at thirteen, this is amazing work.
Secondly, You made a 35 year old woman cry, because your words brought to the forefront of my mind the shared emotions and issues with looking in the mirror.
I see you, You see you, you\'ll find your equilibrium eventually, just don\'t ever forget that we are our own worst critic.
💕
January 11th, 2023 19:46
\"Depression\" does not belong in quotations.
Doggerel Dave said:
I am not sure an 80 something male has any right to intervene, advise or whatever a 13 something female, but here I am!
First, your writing is great - don’t give up on it. I refer you back to Rocky above.
Also don’t give up on life. Despite my vintage, I remember those years very vividly ( it\'s my short-term memory I very occasionally have trouble with). Depression is very common in the days of youth - I certainly suffered from it quite severely during my teens. Comes, I believe, from a feeling of being so totally powerless. Advice given by your elders who have some control over their lives is arrogant, and must, I suppose be tolerated to a degree but take it for what it is (not much) and find your own path. One day……..
I for one would like to see more of your work. I hope you read other poems, find your own group within the free mix here and comment/respond when you feel able. MPS is an interactive site and works best that way. Above all, have fun.
January 11th, 2023 17:34
Doggerel Dave said:
I am not sure an 80 something male has any right to intervene, advise or whatever a 13 something female, but here I am!
First, your writing is great - don’t give up on it. I refer you back to Rocky above.
Also don’t give up on life. Despite my vintage, I remember those years very vividly ( it\'s my short-term memory I very occasionally have trouble with). Depression is very common in the days of youth - I certainly suffered from it quite severely during my teens. Comes, I believe, from a feeling of being so totally powerless. Advice given by your elders who have some control over their lives is arrogant, and must, I suppose be tolerated to a degree but take it for what it is (not much) and find your own path. One day……..
I for one would like to see more of your work. I hope you read other poems, find your own group within the free mix here and comment/respond when you feel able. MPS is an interactive site and works best that way. Above all, have fun.
January 11th, 2023 17:34
\"Depression\" does not belong in quotations.
Rocky Lagou said:
Omg!!
As a depressed teen myself this poem hit so close to home. I feel like people, especially adults, downplay the extent to which our modern youth suffers and it is so unfair. My own dad is such a culprit, claiming that my melancholy is nothing more than exaggeration but, according to him, most definitely not a mental condition. The way you built this poem up by putting the word \"depression\" in quotations and then by not in the final line really delivers your message in an impactful way. To think you\'re 13 and writing these types of poems is fascinating. I was still writing \"roses are red, violets are blue\" at age 13.
January 11th, 2023 08:51
Rocky Lagou said:
Omg!!
As a depressed teen myself this poem hit so close to home. I feel like people, especially adults, downplay the extent to which our modern youth suffers and it is so unfair. My own dad is such a culprit, claiming that my melancholy is nothing more than exaggeration but, according to him, most definitely not a mental condition. The way you built this poem up by putting the word \"depression\" in quotations and then by not in the final line really delivers your message in an impactful way. To think you\'re 13 and writing these types of poems is fascinating. I was still writing \"roses are red, violets are blue\" at age 13.
January 11th, 2023 08:51
