Comments received on poems by ayoits_luka



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Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:

A good poem engaging to read .. beautiful in its flow and words ))

January 16th, 2023 04:32

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L. B. Mek said:

(\'useless\'
is, by its very name
a kin, to \'use\'
maybe others at any, one
snapshot perspective of Time or Place
seem, to have more use
or purpose
yet
none of us know, like
those droplets, lost
to monsoon showers
which, drop
will determine the birth of a brooklet
or which brooklet, of the many
that falter eventually, will
end-up being that vital
last addition, to birth a stream
and-on
till, we\'re looking up the majesty of waterfalls
collated destiny\'s
shaping the mountains of our planet
Everest itself, sculpted
by a mere droplet...)
so be kind, to yourself dear poet
last time i checked
none of us had a vote
in choosing to exist before, birth
so we\'re all trying to correct, our fate\'s
after the fact..
maybe we should \'Reach\'
for those easier yields
let happiness come n go
in its illusive state
while, we craft our days
out of shallow smiles
that never reach our eyes
but so what
if we but make it, to another
daybreak
we\'ve won, and we get to throw
one more day\'s worth of dice
and see, if eventually
we too, may roll sixes for a change
or
fly over mountains, in our dreams
whichever comes first
stay strong! thanks for sharing
and choosing to fight
and letting us know, we who recognise
your words and relate
are not the only ones
aspiring to fly, even
in our wingless state..
to achieve, we must first
envision
that\'s what dreams are for

January 16th, 2023 04:26