Comments received on poems by essence of moon
The Nature
MendedFences27 said:
The planet we live on is truly a gift from God, so why are we destroying it? That\'s what I got from your poem. It is much too important of a message to use casual language (ain\'t). ( Perhaps, \"Are these not what we wanted?\" ) Also you might consider some puntuation and less capitalization. I say these things only for your consideration. After all, the artistic choices are all yours.
I enjoyed your poem, and consider it well expressed as is, but the choice is yours, - Phil A.
August 22nd, 2023 09:28
MendedFences27 said:
The planet we live on is truly a gift from God, so why are we destroying it? That\'s what I got from your poem. It is much too important of a message to use casual language (ain\'t). ( Perhaps, \"Are these not what we wanted?\" ) Also you might consider some puntuation and less capitalization. I say these things only for your consideration. After all, the artistic choices are all yours.
I enjoyed your poem, and consider it well expressed as is, but the choice is yours, - Phil A.
August 22nd, 2023 09:28
