Comments received on poems by hharding23
A simple mystery.
notapoet said:
Really enjoyed this piece, a great way to introduce yourself and your work to the community.... Keep em coming!
August 28th, 2016 10:50
notapoet said:
Really enjoyed this piece, a great way to introduce yourself and your work to the community.... Keep em coming!
August 28th, 2016 10:50
A simple mystery.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME HARDING ~ THANKS FOR A CHALLENGING FIRST POEM ! For a maiden poem it is excellent ~ you have innocently embodied many of the elements of MODERN 21st C Poetry. 1. It does not have to have a RHYME PATTERN 2. It does not have to scan (syllable pattern in the lines). 3. It is good to lay it out in lines (as you have done) It looks like a POEM ! 4. It must be from the heart ~ which yours is. The structure is great ~ the subject is personal and enigmatic. You make a personal statement and state you are YELLOW. You then critique another who claims to understand your life but insists you are GREEN. I agree with your argument inmy eyes ~ you are indeed YELLOW. In the same way I am MAUVE and would argue to the death anyone who opposed my perceived colour ~ I am what I am ~ just as you are what you are FOREVER YELLOW ! Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN
August 27th, 2016 14:32
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME HARDING ~ THANKS FOR A CHALLENGING FIRST POEM ! For a maiden poem it is excellent ~ you have innocently embodied many of the elements of MODERN 21st C Poetry. 1. It does not have to have a RHYME PATTERN 2. It does not have to scan (syllable pattern in the lines). 3. It is good to lay it out in lines (as you have done) It looks like a POEM ! 4. It must be from the heart ~ which yours is. The structure is great ~ the subject is personal and enigmatic. You make a personal statement and state you are YELLOW. You then critique another who claims to understand your life but insists you are GREEN. I agree with your argument inmy eyes ~ you are indeed YELLOW. In the same way I am MAUVE and would argue to the death anyone who opposed my perceived colour ~ I am what I am ~ just as you are what you are FOREVER YELLOW ! Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN
August 27th, 2016 14:32
