Comments received on poems by eparker28
Colors
gelyn said:
Aww. ... This is a dark poem ...I can feel how it hurts, the words are well executed on how you want to portray an abused lover. .. Hope this is not literally you. ...
Hugs. .
well done to this
Gel (critic)
December 8th, 2016 20:20
gelyn said:
Aww. ... This is a dark poem ...I can feel how it hurts, the words are well executed on how you want to portray an abused lover. .. Hope this is not literally you. ...
Hugs. .
well done to this
Gel (critic)
December 8th, 2016 20:20
Love Hurts
gelyn said:
Hi,
I know what you want to say here I have some suggetions and hope you can consider..
Hurts when (and)its a(n) unexplainable feeling
love hurts when the one you love(is) not on the same page as you
love hurts when you look in my eyes(and what\'s only there is only pain and hurt) you see pain and hurt
love hurts when (The one) you love one (ommit \'one\' here)can(\')t say \"i love you 2\"
love hurts when you do everything and anything for your love one ( and he doesn\'t see or return any)
love hurts when your love one don\'t appreciate you
love hurts when you want only him and no one else
love hurts when the love of your life wants someone else
love hurts when love doesn\'t exist anymore (.)
Gel(critic)
December 8th, 2016 00:43
gelyn said:
Hi,
I know what you want to say here I have some suggetions and hope you can consider..
Hurts when (and)its a(n) unexplainable feeling
love hurts when the one you love(is) not on the same page as you
love hurts when you look in my eyes(and what\'s only there is only pain and hurt) you see pain and hurt
love hurts when (The one) you love one (ommit \'one\' here)can(\')t say \"i love you 2\"
love hurts when you do everything and anything for your love one ( and he doesn\'t see or return any)
love hurts when your love one don\'t appreciate you
love hurts when you want only him and no one else
love hurts when the love of your life wants someone else
love hurts when love doesn\'t exist anymore (.)
Gel(critic)
December 8th, 2016 00:43
