Comments received on poems by EpsilonLessThanZero
Drugs are bad
Poetic Dan said:
I\'ll be honest my words just hit, so I like to just write it. I got it up to the part with \"cunt\" (which is a nice line just by it self) but it lost me a bit after that, came back with a nice ending.
Hope I\'m making sense lol
May 15th, 2019 08:16
Poetic Dan said:
I\'ll be honest my words just hit, so I like to just write it. I got it up to the part with \"cunt\" (which is a nice line just by it self) but it lost me a bit after that, came back with a nice ending.
Hope I\'m making sense lol
May 15th, 2019 08:16
Drugs are bad
Poetic Dan said:
I don\'t really know your punchlines, maybe I\'m just getting old.
But I feel in your soul, you are brave and bold
Remembering its how many started until time heals the old.
You may know of 2pac but do you know brother Ali?
They started with passion and strength but later albums came compassionate understanding as with Akala.
You remind me of this!
Much appreciated
With peace and respect
May 15th, 2019 08:03
Poetic Dan said:
I don\'t really know your punchlines, maybe I\'m just getting old.
But I feel in your soul, you are brave and bold
Remembering its how many started until time heals the old.
You may know of 2pac but do you know brother Ali?
They started with passion and strength but later albums came compassionate understanding as with Akala.
You remind me of this!
Much appreciated
With peace and respect
May 15th, 2019 08:03
Game Over
Poetic Dan said:
I\'m not sure how old you are?
I feel your lines are from the heart
But there\'s also a fighter trying real hard
As you hit on the line of Bruce Lee I heard
\"be water my friend\" shapeless ready to be free.
As it feels you do with a pen
Well expressed
Much peace and respect
May 14th, 2019 11:30
Poetic Dan said:
I\'m not sure how old you are?
I feel your lines are from the heart
But there\'s also a fighter trying real hard
As you hit on the line of Bruce Lee I heard
\"be water my friend\" shapeless ready to be free.
As it feels you do with a pen
Well expressed
Much peace and respect
May 14th, 2019 11:30
Dead Leaders
The Swarthy Bard said:
Hello E.L.T.Z.!
I read your latest poem as you requested. Though your signature style of poetry is very different from mine, I nevertheless liked your poem. The political commentary that it expresses is very apt and I certainly agree with it (as a liberal). The phrasal end-rhymes in lines 1 and 2 is very clever and immediately grabs my attention (as a writer of rhymed poetry): \"...precedent matters/ ...president matters\". The play on the verb(s) \"believes\" and \"beLEAVES\" also keeps your reader on his or her toes, rhetorically and poetically speaking. And the image or likeness created by your use of the middle-alignment format function of the text writer (provided by this site) with the text of your poem is reminiscent to me of an Old World style of water-fountain (that can be found in the town square of a Tuscan village in Europe). Which begs the question, did you intend this (visual effect)? Regardless, I like your poem and definitely feel that it stays true to your signature style of poetic expression and I therefore believe that you ought to keep pursuing your unique poetic voice to the point of mastery. Thanks for the read and for the honor of your request for my critique of your poem! Your colleague in all things poetic (and lyrical), TSB.
May 13th, 2019 09:26
The Swarthy Bard said:
Hello E.L.T.Z.!
I read your latest poem as you requested. Though your signature style of poetry is very different from mine, I nevertheless liked your poem. The political commentary that it expresses is very apt and I certainly agree with it (as a liberal). The phrasal end-rhymes in lines 1 and 2 is very clever and immediately grabs my attention (as a writer of rhymed poetry): \"...precedent matters/ ...president matters\". The play on the verb(s) \"believes\" and \"beLEAVES\" also keeps your reader on his or her toes, rhetorically and poetically speaking. And the image or likeness created by your use of the middle-alignment format function of the text writer (provided by this site) with the text of your poem is reminiscent to me of an Old World style of water-fountain (that can be found in the town square of a Tuscan village in Europe). Which begs the question, did you intend this (visual effect)? Regardless, I like your poem and definitely feel that it stays true to your signature style of poetic expression and I therefore believe that you ought to keep pursuing your unique poetic voice to the point of mastery. Thanks for the read and for the honor of your request for my critique of your poem! Your colleague in all things poetic (and lyrical), TSB.
May 13th, 2019 09:26
Dead Leaders
Poetic Dan said:
That was brilliant, I\'ll admit it took my brain a few attempts to read and get the flow but second time round it had a sick beat.
You\'ve got passion my friend
That kush line was fantastic and the start, with a banging end.
We can\'t be everyone\'s cuppa
Much appreciated
With peace and respect
May 13th, 2019 09:21
Poetic Dan said:
That was brilliant, I\'ll admit it took my brain a few attempts to read and get the flow but second time round it had a sick beat.
You\'ve got passion my friend
That kush line was fantastic and the start, with a banging end.
We can\'t be everyone\'s cuppa
Much appreciated
With peace and respect
May 13th, 2019 09:21
Ugly
dusk arising said:
Ugly is only whats outside and only negative to humans. but what faith do we have in humanity. when its all we are but we are on its outside.
try telling your pet dog you are ugly and dont fit in..... try it? a dogs SEES with more that its eyes.
a first timer huh? hope youre staying for the rest of the show
May 12th, 2019 15:00
dusk arising said:
Ugly is only whats outside and only negative to humans. but what faith do we have in humanity. when its all we are but we are on its outside.
try telling your pet dog you are ugly and dont fit in..... try it? a dogs SEES with more that its eyes.
a first timer huh? hope youre staying for the rest of the show
May 12th, 2019 15:00
Ugly
Poetic Dan said:
This was brilliant, I was completely engrossed. Very nice flow with a super ending.
Nothing is as it feels
Thank you
With an add welcome
Look forward to seeing you again
May 12th, 2019 10:25
Poetic Dan said:
This was brilliant, I was completely engrossed. Very nice flow with a super ending.
Nothing is as it feels
Thank you
With an add welcome
Look forward to seeing you again
May 12th, 2019 10:25
