I’ll make you a deal
Just promise you’ll try,
Keep taking those pills
And swallow you’re pride.
“I’ll always be here”
Heard it too many times,
When push comes to shove
Just bullshit and lies.
I see you.
You see me.
I won’t hide.
I’m awake now.
I’m watching.
Im outside.
So close to breaking
Selfish I know,
Got so much to live for
But please let me go.
The feelings are real
The pain is the truth,
I’m fighting this battle
Can’t see a way through.
But I see you.
You see me.
I won’t hide.
I’m awake now.
I’m watching.
Im outside.
Maybe I’m crazy.
Maybe I’m blind.
Maybe I’m wrong,
Baby I’ve tried.
Counterfeit faces.
Stapled on smiles.
Centre of attention,
Baby I’m tired.
So who will I be?
When it comes to an end.
Can’t beat this Demon,
So I’ll make it my friend.
I see it.
It sees me.
I won’t hide.
It’s awake now.
It’s watching.
It’s inside.
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Author:
clareuk (
Offline) - Published: August 19th, 2018 08:27
- Category: Reflection
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Comments4
Clare this poem is genuinely the best I’ve read, so relatable and truthful
Your writing flowed perfectly!
I now envy you and feel my writing can be binned lol
Thankyou so much for your kind words. It took a lot to publish this as it is the deepest part of me. Please don’t ever bin anything that comes from your mind. Expression is beautiful no matter what x
That’s what made it so beautiful
It was your truth and heart speaking
And I related to it a lot x
Incredibly done piece
ThAnkyou so much x
Loved this. Know your demons, know yourself..... be whole, be strong. It's all in here.
❤️
WELCOME CLARE : Thanks for your first POEM. Elegantly penned and pulsating with Rhyme & Rhythm. Love the repetition, hallmark of a good POEM
But I see you
You see me
I wont hide
Im awake now
Im watching you
Im outside
Also the subtle variation in the last two stanzas : awesome!
BUT as well as an elegant STRUCTURE a GOOD Poem must have a a GOOD Subject and your Subject "INNER DEMONS" complements the Structure! We all have them CLARE and in my experience : we all have to deal with them in our own way : OK I trust you found sharing this very personal Poem CATHARTIC. Thinking of YOU : Love ANGELA XXXX
Thankyou for your comments Angela. I appreciate the feedback so much. X
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