Aislinn Wilson

Tongues

Darling, I will fetch a thimble

to sew you a necklace fresh with tongues,

to match the flame upon your crown -

broken, gnarled, bursting with light.

I have loved you

for so long.

 

When we met my feet twisted with lavender,

and I was yet to feel shame.

I knew not the dove's corpse

betrayed by corvidius kin.

So drown me in in Narcissus' lake

where the gull

caws my name

Comments3

  • orchidee

    A good write Aislinn. Though I often say that on comments, but sometimes don't get the theme. Not just your poems - there's other authors too, which may be too cryptic for me at times.
    Sorry I can't help more on this one.

    • Aislinn Wilson

      Appreciated. It has mixed imagery, but some has to do with the garden of eden, the crucifixion, pentecost, and also the pope releasing the doves in Ukraine in 2014, one which was killed by a crow, the other by a seagull.

    • Neville

      a very much enjoyed poem... cheers.. Neville

      • Aislinn Wilson

        Much appreciated!

        • Neville

          write on friend.... :)

        • Michael Edwards

          We all view and read poetry differently and without wanting to appear arrogant I can usually spot a few changes in the poetry of others which I feel would help improve them. Having said all that this is original and reads so well there is nothing I would want to suggest apart from a little punctuation to encourage the reader to pause for effect . It's a great write.

          • Aislinn Wilson

            That's very helpful, thank you! I will consider and play with punctuation

            • Michael Edwards

              My pleasure - hope you didn't mind.



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