Death denied. Endless
Cruel fate. Peace skips out of reach.
Lost. Relentlessness.
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Death denied. Endless
Cruel fate. Peace skips out of reach.
Lost. Relentlessness.
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Love 575s - I never call them Haikus or senryus etc as the purists can be quick to criticise (not here but on other sites I hasten to add) - I just think of them as 'in the haiku format'. Anyway enough of my waffle - love this one - a real feel of desolation to it.
Indeed there is.
Thanks Michael.
There is something about the brevity of the first which is powerfully succinct.
The message has to be pertinent.
It cannot linger or be drawn out.
It has to grab you with every word chosen.
I dont know the rules on answering prose with prose, so forgive me if I am out of place.
However, please read the "575" that I hold dear to me, and reflect on your own?
Just, let yourself go.
Let yourself float and the Words,
Will carry you home.
That's beautiful.
Thank you for sharing.
In truth my words are my therapy and escape.
But in the end, I cannot escape my self.
I hope your own words and others, bring you peace and steady your ship.
🌟
the punctuation in this, set it apart
short, sharp and powerful as any kidney punch...
Thanks Neville.
Though it was not intended as a punch I don't think.
Just a terrible darkness which I sense to end to.
I kind of felt that my friend, mind you, a kidney punch can kill ya
Might be preferable...
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