Inviting.
The thin blue flame of my night-burnt fire
grows dim as dawn unquiets
another day's numberless happenings,
culls light from dark and carries
life forward while I in excited mood watch
first flaps of sparrowed pools lost
on those still bedded and fastened to sleep.
The voice of new-dropped lambs' growing
bleats rises thru' moorland
dewed by keen morning as I catch first
breeze stirring shored boats
below and beach yawns in pebbley coves.
My window unlatched wafts woke snatches
of sonance to day's approach
as closeted light now opens blue dome
for me to see rising old
Sol's winking invite to seize early moments
and take an inspiring
look at nature's Carp Diem all on my own.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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A lovely write Fay.
Thank you Orchi.
this is without a shadow of doubt.. one of THE most beautiful poems....
Large case intended... neville x
I couldn't put it better Neville - in fact it should all be in upper case.
Sincere thanks Neville - - your review is very encouraging and so pleased you enjoyed the read.
Your comment is humbling dear Michael - - having tried a few times cannot seem to get my reply put in the right order at the moment but am most grateful for the compliments on my efforts by both yourself and Neville.
my pleasure, as always.. N
There's a sombre air in the postings today This is peaceful Fay and full of hope
Beautiful
Thank you
My thanks to you too Andrew for the visit and comment. Am delighted you enjoyed the read.
-- Blessings and good wishes - - Fay
Gosh, you do write so beautifully about the dawn. How many of your dawn poems have i read now?
Wonderful descriptions like 'sparrowed pools'... only you do this.
Yes the changes of time from dawn to dusk have always attracted my pen dear friend - - so glad you liked the scene I tried to convey.
Thanks for sharing FAY:
Lovely descrioption of a Cornish morning
Sparrowed pools ~ bleat of new-dropped Lambs
Sirring of moored Boats ~scents of Dawn !
Im not too near the Coast (12 miles ) but i share the other sounds. Im generally up by 6 am to make an entry into MPS before WORK !
Yours as always CARPE DIEM ~ BRIAN 🧡🧡🧡🧡
You rise early and get the blessings of light returning - - good for you Brian - - pleased you enjoyed the sparrows at play - whatever the time of year they love to make splashes in pools around here.
A pleasant write Fay keep up great work.
- T
Thank you Theta and am pleased you enjoyed the read of early morning's happenings around here .
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