OBSCURE SENRYUS (5)

Michael Edwards

 

Bananas in bowl
yellow skins slowly turn brown
no sun tan lotion.

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: May 14th, 2019 00:09
  • Comment from author about the poem: Perhaps not so obscure but quaintly daft.
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • ANGELA & BRIAN

    BANANAS IN PYJAMAS
    IT 7PM HERE IN THE BAHAMAS
    SORRY I MEANT AUCKLAND NZ !

    Thanks for reprising UNCLE MIKE ~ great Abstraction ~ great Senryu. CONFUSIUS He say *A Banana a Day keep OOGIE OOGIE MAN away*

    Keep them coming they brighten our Days & Nights
    Tribute to the Late Great DORIS DAY today please visit !
    LOVE & HARMONY : ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡🧡🧡🧡

    • Michael Edwards

      Aw thanks - you can't beat a banana unless you duffer from hyperkalemia. Loved DD - will look in.

      • Lorna

        Does hyperkalemia make you "duffer"?

        • Michael Edwards

          Sure does - I often suffer the duffer lol

        • Andrew Charles Forrest

          Now you don't see those greens evey day Michael
          I imagine this is a piece the camera does not do justice to it looks very imposing and imressive
          Great work again in both respects

          • Michael Edwards

            It's one of my smaller works and does look better 'in the flesh'. It's still with me and I'm surprised it hasn't sold - other lesser works have long since gone.

          • dusk arising

            raspberry sauce
            in banana ice cream
            sundae bloody sundae

          • orchidee

            A fine write and pic M. Would that be Oogie Berles, as A& B say? You met him/her?

            • Michael Edwards

              Something to do with Company B ?

              • Lorna

                Oh as in the "the oogie boogie bugle boy of Company B"? Did I get it did i get it??? Laughing......

                • Michael Edwards

                  An obscure comment - you sure got it Lorna.

                • Lorna

                  I love the daft little poem. But - and this is heresy because your paintings are amazing always - but I detest squishy brown bananas and that's what this painting is of (yes I know bad sentence ending) - up with which I shall not put. Perhaps there are more of us out here than you know and that's why it isn't selling.......... overripe banana phobia.

                  • Michael Edwards

                    Been painting outside in Leicester University Botanic Garden today - hot sun - I'm now looking like a ripe banana - hope I'm not squishy.

                    • Lorna

                      As long as you don't smell like one........ Phew...............

                      • Michael Edwards

                        Didn't know bananas had noses. 😉

                        • Lorna

                          If Picasso painted one it might have.........

                        • Poetic Dan

                          Hahaha, love it! Feels like my nose, recovering from surgery. No sun for me

                          • Michael Edwards

                            In the sun - nose damaged
                            Out of the sun - lack of vitamin D
                            Take you pick (so to speak)

                          • Suresh

                            I don't know what the H*** everybody is talking about ...... OH! I get it - jibber jabber.

                            • Michael Edwards

                              Nor do I - I was lost even when I wrote the ditty - is there no hope?

                              • Lorna

                                Here's the oogie boogie bugle boy reference - WWII!!! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xh4ugYiXF-Q have fun!



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