I stand alone
while I drown
without drinking
Would be so drunk
to drift off
away without
sleeping
and what of today
wasting time
just a day for
safe keeping
breaking the dark
dreaming a dance
in the park
never speaking
throw me a line
to rattle
and chime
half completing
standing alone
to silently drown
without drinking
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dusk arising (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I am on a course of drugs which are poison to my body and disturb many of my normal body functions. I often exist in a state of sleepless exhaustion and nausea hoping with every positive cell within me that the end result will justify this dehumanising period.
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this is such a good poem,.. regardless of the inspiration behind it and indeed the motives for posting it today, you should feel proud of it at least and your good self........ Neville
Thanks Neville.... maybe the drugs wrote it m8.
some are better at painting than they are of writing... but let me know how ya get on.....
Since I am not aware of the cause of your treatment, I can only assume that it is dire. Yet, you compose such intense poem
tbh it kinda describes how i feel in a limbo between illness and hope.
Thank you Dusk Arising
My support and encouragement is with you with what you are experiencing.
May you come out much stronger as a result.
An incredible awesome poem.
Keep writing FineB
Thank you FineB... i shall keep on posting.
Incredibly done, I saw something different until I read your comment.
You are a powerful soul, I have no doubt you'll heal. Ready to spin those lines right off your golden wheels
Much peace and rest my friend
LOL@golden wheels... (all that glistens is not gold, i have muddy boots not golden wheels) thanks for your thoughts m8 .... tell me what you saw before you read the notes?
I saw my stepfather, when he goes back on the wagon and starts to turn yellow. I've ask him before but he does not share feelings, but I know he's lost and sinking even when he's not drinking.
Forever drowning!
I am not sure what you are going through but you should be proud of your poem because it is powerful! Hope you feel better soon!
gonna be about 10 more weeks of feeling yuk they tell me... thanks for your kindness Christina8
Powerful write d a, I am sure all will be well, perhaps you should pick up the Saxophone again.
Yes i will, i feel it calling out to me. There are new tunes i want to work on.
Life brings in the effects of what the human body can actually handle. Even young children, babies too, can have serious health problems from the time of birth deseases, fevers, HIV, drug addicts. alcoholism and the list goes on for eternity. There are no answers in some cases which can lead to unfortunate circumstances. I hope, at least, that somewhere somehow will hopefully be able to ease up with whatever the health is in you. May God bless you in order for another miracle to happen. Sending positive vibes, my freind..
Thank you so much Kevin. I'm lucky to have lasted this long when i think back to so many who didnt make it. What goes around - comes around, as they say. Just my luck to cop for it but such is life. I just need to give my everything to getting cured and let the world pass me by for a while.... books to read etc.
Sending the warmest of wishes as you undertake another few weeks of this which I hope is the healing process dear poet-friend......... your verse well describes how strong you must be to endure and you will
I am sure soon feel more alive.......... hugs and more .xxx Fay
It's chemo therapy Fay. I just had a 2nd bout of I.V. and life gets interesting in a hazy sort of way. I remain very positive, i'm going to get thru this with the excellent team who are caring for me.
Definitely mind altering drugs which i guess is reflected in what i publish.
Thanks as always for your care and interest.
Hoping you're on the mend this time. Deep sound poem from a real space. Enjoyed it!
Long way to go with this but i guess i'll be keeping MPS posted with my thoughts. These drugs do alter my mind a bit and to me this particular poem is quite quite realistic of my state.
If you ever got drunk you'll be aware of that drowning feeling and the altered relativity of your thoughts. That's pretty well where this came from but without drink.
Thanks for looking in and commenting.
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