Wasted

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  Neville August 8th, 2019 07:07

  say it like ya mean it why dont ya
  
  this reads more like self loathing in its own write , rather than just depression...
  
  Of course not liking or loving oneself often also goes hand in hand with depression...
  
  and a whole heap of other affective disorders.. Your words here feel like you are trying desperately to beat a black cloud with a blunt instrument...
  
  Now from an analytical perspective.. it would be far too easy to arrive at the conclusion you see yourself as both the blunt instrument and black cloud.....
  
  Whereas I think that is bollocks... You are a very talented writer who needs to learn how to format poetry such as this to make it sit better on the page...... My rant is over... sheesh, do I love the odd rant..... Neville

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    sylviasearcherAugust 8th, 2019 07:27

    I’m not sure I even understand what you were ranting about.
    
    This website does not lend itself well to formatting

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    sylviasearcherAugust 8th, 2019 08:17

    I have tried and tried for it not to centre and failed and failed
    
    Perhaps we should take something poetic from my inability to achieve satisfactory alignment?

3 more comments

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  Poetic Dan August 8th, 2019 07:57

  Hit my spot today, thank you!

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    sylviasearcherAugust 8th, 2019 08:14

    If that’s your spot too then hugs to you x

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  Suresh August 8th, 2019 10:16

  No, no dead end yet, if we can put out words like this,,,,,,

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    sylviasearcherAugust 8th, 2019 10:17

    Thanks but still uncertain 😐

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  Michael Edwards August 8th, 2019 10:53

  Forget the format - it stands up as it is. Super work.

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    sylviasearcherAugust 9th, 2019 01:13

    Well o did fiddle with it under the guidance of Neville lol.
    
    Thanks for not thinking this one was a waste of time 😊