Fay Slimm

Naked Heart.

 

 

Naked Heart.

 

Come drug of sleep,
drop, heavy cloak of woolly mind that dulls clear thought.

Hold me tightly.

Drowse my downbeat mind,
change to calm the restless weight of reliving the former.

Come chains of stupor,
let mood taste freedom from knowing our love cannot be.

Night swallow me.

Keep me from waking
and may un-distressful nothingness become my activity.

Come thickest gloom
Dissimulate and clothe my naked heart from further light.

Close my tired eyes,
let sight view no more duo's demise as sleep holds sway.

Silence take me.

 

Comments9

  • orchidee

    Erm, goodnight there Fay! heehee.

  • Unsub

    Fay,

    had to read this twice as I fell asleep after the opening amazing stanza!

    "Come drug of sleep,
    drop, heavy cloak of woolly mind that dulls clear thought."

    that is the best opening of a poem I've read in a long time.

    A whispered version of this repeated over & over with some gentle rain sound in the background will be the perfect insomnia cure.

    You've crafted a sleepy image you can just snuggle up into.

    Unsub.

    • Fay Slimm

      Wow - - so pleased you liked the opener to this little verse my friend - plus your imagination saw it as a help to insomnia too.......... thank you very muchly Unsub.

    • ANGELA & BRIAN

      ANGELA HERE (9pm Thursday !} GOOD MORNING FAY ~ thanks for sharing ! This is my interpretation ! I knew lots of NUNS I was raised as a Catholic ! In my mind they had a sweet & peaceful life. The Younger ones were very beautiful but had chosen to be perpetual Virgins & Brides of Christ ! I would love to be a NUN but only for a few weeks like Whoopie Goldberg in Sister Act to lick the Choir into Shape ! Love the Structure & Subject of your very elegant Poem ! Thnaks for checking WOODLAND SOUNDS !

      Blessings & Peace & Joy
      Love ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡🧡

      • Fay Slimm

        Thank you dear Angela for your interesting interpretation of my little offering called "Naked Heart" - - - and yes I just loved the woodland sounds in your posting today.

        • OUTBACK

          CATHOLIC SCHOOL TEACHER - NUNS* ! HA MONSTERS* of DUPLISITY* / DECEPTION* & TORTURE* - THAT BEAT THE S*IT OUT of MYSELF & ALL THE CATHOLIC SCHOOL INMATES* of THAT " HELL " !- EVERY SINGLE DAY NON STOP for 8 GD* YEARS ! VIRGINS = ? BRIDES of CHRIST ! HA ! THE WORLD STILL AS in DINIAL - AS EVER IT SO WAS & " IS " ! ++++++

        • Neville

          Ah yes.. a true soporific is so hard to come by these days...

          perfect dear friend and poet..... N

          • Fay Slimm

            Ah - I am delighted that the write gave that soporific feel tot the read Nev........... I used lots of sleepified words and sounds and am glad you thought they were effective. Thanking you for your lovely comment.................. Fay

            • Neville

              always a pleasure Fay... never let me down yet anyway..

              Neville

            • Christina8

              Beautiful words Fay! Really loved this poem.

              • Fay Slimm

                I am thrilled that you found the read enjoyable dear Christina - I had hope the addition of lots of ssssss's would give the idea of sleepy appeal.

              • Poetic Dan

                You are so amazingly good at being you, thank you for every thought you share and create in my view!

                A picture never dull, like the light inside you.

              • dusk arising

                Yes, Unsub is spot-on about your first verse.... you show my inner thoughts when my head hits the pillow.

                Still plagued with daytime slumbers from my drug regieme I'm often more hopeful than successful at night though.

                I'm thinking these words must be similar to your own bedtime mantra, and a successful one too, for we, your readers, know you are fully awake each pre-dawn to poetically enchant us with your enquiring observations of natures day awakening.

              • FredPeyer

                You do have a way with words, Fay. Beautiful opening and I also like that last line very much.

              • Goldfinch60

                Beautiful write Fay, like Unsub and others I think that first line is wonderful. May your nights asleep be always thus, I m sure mine will be when I read this poem before bed tonight.
                Andy.



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