Sitting here waiting for you
In my rusty old car with the stereo on
Cars hum by rocking me sideways
Will you do the same?
The music playing captures my mood
The ambience of the night matching the tune
What will i say? Will you judge or leave that to my own demons?
It would be so easy to turn the engine on and pull away
But i know I will have a passenger looking at me in the rear view mirror
Would you be disappointed?
The stereo changes to a different tune
A song of life and living
Thoughts ripple across the airwaves to a different kind of future
I can’t see you in it
But im not afraid or melancholy
I think because i know how this chapter ends
Just me sitting in my rusty old car
With the stereo on
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Author:
Saxon Crow (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Aftrr reading so much excellent poetry on here i thought I would attempt to capture a mood. So this is my first go!
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Sitting with music can bring every emotion to you but when the music changes into its own glory and wonder that glory and wonder will be within you and never fail.
Great write SC.
Andy
Very true GF. Music is the only true magic.
Good write Crow. Pensive or Pensieve? 'Pensieve' exists. I know now I looked it up! lol.
My bad. Far too much Harry Potter floating around in my head! Saying that though, it still works!
There is an actual thing called a pensieve, I discovered! You can Google it too.
Its from Harry potrer Orchi!
PENSIEVE ~ Is the correct word in the TITLE. It was coined by J K R to mean ~ A shallow dish elaborately decorsted with GEMSTONES and associated with WIZARDRY (FIDO wont let Orchidee read Harry Potter Books ! In case He gets involved in the Dark Side !) It can not only recreate MEMORIES but enables one to live them ! Hence it is the correct word in your title and not PENSIVE (Thoughtful) as ORCHEE seems to suggest. The much stronger word (PENSIEVE) perfetly descries your Poem !
Your attempt at a lyric poem is excellent. It throbs with all our memories of the PAST ~ clapped out cars and long forgoiien tunes ! A car however RUSTY always had pulling power and the JUDIES I dated in Liverpool ~ at the start of the 21st C ~ were impressed with any type of car !
Those were the days my Friend ~ I thought would never end ! I wont elaborate on Diamond Lill ~ Queen of the Tenaments ! A classic and very nostalgic ditty Thnaks again for sharing ! Please check OUR todays poem ~ a very sad and tragic memory.
Blessings and a Penny for Your Memories !
Love BRIAN & ANGELA 💛💛💛💛💛
PENSIEVE ~ Is the correct word in the TITLE. It was coined by J K R to mean ~ A shallow dish elaborately decorsted with GEMSTONES and associated with WIZARDRY (FIDO wont let Orchidee read Harry Potter Books ! In case He gets involved in the Dark Side !) It can not only recreate MEMORIES but enables one to live them ! Hence it is the correct word in your title and not PENSIVE (Thoughtful) as ORCHEE seems to suggest. The much stronger word (PENSIEVE) perfetly descries your Poem !
Your attempt at a lyric poem is excellent. It throbs with all our memories of the PAST ~ clapped out cars and long forgoiien tunes ! A car however RUSTY always had pulling power and the JUDIES I dated in Liverpool ~ at the start of the 21st C ~ were impressed with any type of car !
Those were the days my Friend ~ I thought would never end ! I wont elaborate on Diamond Lill ~ Queen of the Tenaments ! A classic and very nostalgic ditty Thnaks again for sharing ! Please check OUR todays poem ~ a very sad and tragic memory.
Blessings and a Penny for Your Memories !
Love BRIAN & ANGELA 💛💛💛💛💛
Actually Orchi was right. I misspelt pensive. But only because i had the word pensieve in my mind at the time of writing. However, pensieve creates another meaning. So it works both ways. 2 poems for the price of one!
Nice picture you painted here and you painted it well.
On the premise that 'less is more' do you think you could paint an equally pensive picture in your readers mind in just five or six lines?
Ooo a challenge!
As i sat and wondered introspectively
I felt that sense of loneliness that never bothers me
Hows that???
Well if you're happy with it that's all that matters right now.
I don't mind, if you don't mind Crow - pensive or pensieve!
Works well for me either way. But you are right i spelt it wrong, it should have been pensive! Haha
Love the poem! The music i listen to reflects my mood tremendously. Excited for the next poem. 🙂
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