Ha! You're a poet and dontcha just know it. Words are our tools which we contrive to shape our theme. Honing from the clumsy line into the oft sublime.
Yes getting a love song just right is the problem - but poets seem to have the knack as this short but sweet verse relates - maybe tis better when words feel too heavy to scribe TWO OR EVEN MORE love songs to your chosen lady Nev..
An impressive bit of poetic weaving.
Nicely put Nev. I agree! A love song should be simple and straight forward not undulating with the deepest passions of the inferno of love one feels blah blah blah
It appears to me that "Cumbersome" is both heavy" and "long" and capitalized to boot. With it so, the mix of your words becomes more profound. "To weave" it through this love song would be a "heavy" task.So your proposal becomes self-fulfilling.
One suggestion - For rhythm's sake consider dropping the word "single." No 'Love song" should ever have the word "single" in it. - Phil A.
You not only spoil me sir but you have proposed a very practical, poetically novel amendment to this post..... Forgive me if I leave it as is here, but I will surely consider your suggestion in my next book and will credit it to You, so I will.
wonderfully simple but exponentially insightful, I imagine one could return to these words at different landmark's of a life and find them equally: an avenue of solace, or a heart wrenching incision - unfurling, those nightmare's kept bubbling just beneath the veneer of our clown smiles
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Ha! You're a poet and dontcha just know it. Words are our tools which we contrive to shape our theme. Honing from the clumsy line into the oft sublime.
Too true and thank you kindly sir...
Yes getting a love song just right is the problem - but poets seem to have the knack as this short but sweet verse relates - maybe tis better when words feel too heavy to scribe TWO OR EVEN MORE love songs to your chosen lady Nev..
An impressive bit of poetic weaving.
Can't thank my lady enuff dear Fay....
Neville,
So many truths in your wonderful poem!
An enjoyable read indeed!
~Laura~🌻
How extraordinarily kind and so much appreciated too. Thank you my friend..
Neville
You’re very welcome!
A fine write Neville.
I know - them pesky 'evermore''s' are too long. have to shorten them to 'e'ermore'! lol. Such are poet's problems.
Thanks Orchidee true as true can be
Neville
Oh but we should say them anyway! Always enjoy reading them! Clever poem!
Way too kind and true but he thanks thee heavy regardless....
Neville
Nicely put Nev. I agree! A love song should be simple and straight forward not undulating with the deepest passions of the inferno of love one feels blah blah blah
Phew, that’s a relief my friend and appreciated too.
Cheers, Neville
It appears to me that "Cumbersome" is both heavy" and "long" and capitalized to boot. With it so, the mix of your words becomes more profound. "To weave" it through this love song would be a "heavy" task.So your proposal becomes self-fulfilling.
One suggestion - For rhythm's sake consider dropping the word "single." No 'Love song" should ever have the word "single" in it. - Phil A.
You not only spoil me sir but you have proposed a very practical, poetically novel amendment to this post..... Forgive me if I leave it as is here, but I will surely consider your suggestion in my next book and will credit it to You, so I will.
Cheers Phil
Neville
The words of love can be so simple yet so meaningful.
Andy
they can indeed Andy, or so I hear... must y to knock one out sometime soon.... Have a great Tuesday my friend...
Neville
wonderfully simple but exponentially insightful, I imagine one could return to these words at different landmark's of a life and find them equally: an avenue of solace, or a heart wrenching incision - unfurling, those nightmare's kept bubbling just beneath the veneer of our clown smiles
.... How extraordinarily kind of you my fine literary friend .. many thanks indeed .... Neville
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