Timed.
The sea today is blue-gray with streaks
of pale gilding frothing lace over
low tide's exposed cobbled reaches.
Yet on distant sand banks time turns
as greeny-weed flats slacken and
sheets of creeping saline wet dry fur.
Push rotates rattle and wavelets spill
increasing cream when riding high
breakers while bouldered retainers fill.
Stranded kelp in murky pool harbour
stirs as gulls readily beak among
boat-sway to seek opened barnacles.
Feeling the draw of natural backward
and forward I walk shores finding
all footfalls must yield to timed action.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Good write Fay.
Thank you Orchi.
This is equal to holding a conch shell to your ear and hearing the ocean Fay. Excellent.
Ex animo, Alan
What a kindly comparison you make about shells to ears and my humble words - many thanks Alan and hope you are keeping well and safe in your neck of the woods.
Good Afernoon Fay - Angela here - No Clinics this afternoon so Ive been to the E Coast with BR IAN with a PIC-NIC and to meditate on your Tone Poem ! We love your use of WORDS our Poems tend to be more concrete
V 1. Gliding frothing lace
v 2. Greeny-weed flats
V 3. Increasing cream
V 4. Stranded kelp in fast pooling harbour
V 5. All footfalls must yield to tidal action
Perfect word selection - Rhythm eclipsing Rhyme !
We are working on a *Tone Poem* on *Waterfalls* which we hope will be more LYRICAL & less SCIENTIFIC
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
Hope your free afternoon went well dear Angela - - we need to get out and feel sun on our faces - your considered comment on Timed is so welcome and thank you for listing the points you enjoyed .................... hope Smokey is showing he is now settling in his new loving home....... x Fay
Timed and pitched perfectly Fay.. Another smashing example of this most beautiful of art forms...
Thank you hugely - so pleased you enjoyed the read of Timed. - - your support is always appreciated dear friend.
Wonderful write Fay, your words made me feel as though I was walking beside you.
Andy
What a kind comment on Timed and many thanks Andy - - it would be a pleasure to share a walk with you alongside the ocean.
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