dusk arising

a little love song


i tried to leave you,
           but it couldnt be done
i tried to leave you,
           but i never got home
can't ever leave you,
           look what you've done
i tried to leave you
           but these legs wouldn't run

i tried not to love you
             like i just didn't care
i tried not to love you
             but you're everywhere
built up my fences
             fell in your river and drowned
i tried not to love you
             but you pulled it all down

i tried not to tell you
              looked the other way
i tried not to tell you
              till it was all i could say
thought i heard voices
              when i finally heard
i tried not to tell you
               my three little words

i tried to hold back tears
               i looked in your eyes
i tried to hold back tears
               but there's no disguise
my heart stopped beating
               shook in my shoes
i couldn't hold back tears
               hearing "i love you too"


  • orchidee

    A fine write dusk.

    • dusk arising

      And a fine comment from you to thanks.

    • Neville

      this is so cool.. and of course that final "I love you too" is what we all want to hear and sums everything else up perfectly.. I guess you could call that a wrap....


      • dusk arising

        Just a little ditty which wrote itself after the first two lines came to mind.

      • ANGELA & BRIAN

        BRIAN HERE ~ Good Evening *DA* thanks for sharing a great Video. My style of Guitar Playing *Finger pickin* good !* We love your Poems ~ especially when you are in Romantic mood !
        I reached the age of 33 without having been engaged or married (or a Father) despite having many Female friends ! In some ways I considered myself a Professional Batchelor and I enjoyed the freedom & privacy of my own Flat ! But then I met ANGELA (over three years ago) and I was hooked ! I experienced all the restraing factors of True love which you mention in your Love Ballad. We got married three Months ago - and *Its growing stronger - warmer - wilder every day !* It must be love !

        Thanks for sharing ~
        Love - Peace & Joy
        Yours - Brian & Angela !

        • dusk arising

          All your prior loves brought you to the point where you were able to value the virtues of your partner and enjoin for the adventure of marriage.


        • PoeticBiscuit

          Splendid write with a happy little end I wasn’t expecting. A very pleasant read.

          • dusk arising

            Thanks PB.Just another silly love song as somebody famous in their day described such ditties.

          • Fay Slimm.

            An engaging read D.A. Despite what we make up our minds to do Love has its way of proving that hearts cannot be controlled once Love comes along - a song to highlight first class rhyming too.

            • dusk arising

              This just fell out of my fingertips after the first line came to mind. It was inspired by the final scene of the film A Mountain Between Us. A scene which demonstrates exactly the point you make.

            • The Uneducated O.A.P

              Love, you can't see it, you can't hear it, but you can feel it, and it feels, love ly.

              • dusk arising

                Oh it certainly is a deeply felt emotion thats for sure.

              • Goldfinch60

                Wonderful loving write d a, with the final line saying everything any of us need to hear.


                • dusk arising

                  I'm going to have to befriend a parrot and teach it to say those important words.

                • ron parrish aka wordman

                  but you tried

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