Fay Slimm.

Eyeing.

 

 

Eyeing.

 

A fish,
like translucent shadow 
slowly shows silver through dimly

low-lit submarine green.

 

A gill
like laced edge of poncho,    
rising to roll a lake's morning face

steadily sways to breathe.

 

A skin,
of thinnest divide knows
it is separated from my airy flesh

solely by liquid need.

 

A fin,
touched by finger coated        
in bubbles for closer contact slips

to more safety beneath.

 

A flip,
and fish dives fast below  
in mist churned by interference

'tho glassily eyeing me.

Comments6

  • dusk arising

    A failed trout tickling? No, Fay wouldn't do that....

    Though yes you would, without the final intent for supper..... re-reading...

    Yes there it is... a beautiful description of truly communing with nature and the touch of a sleek wild fish.... I love the way you build this piece.... I have to ask, did you do it?

    What mind does a fish possess, eyeing you?

    Yep, immersed again in your words i bathed in this one. Keeping it as a fav.

    • Fay Slimm.

      Thanks D.A. for both your interest and lovely comment on Eyeing - and yes I did it for a brief moment and never forgot the feeling of oneness - I did the same one day with a dolphin who followed the boat I was in - and the feeling went just as deep - the picture was not of my hand I hasten to say.................. grateful thanks too for listing this one among your faves.

    • orchidee

      Good write Fay.

      • Fay Slimm.

        Thank you Orchi.

      • Suresh

        a definition within a definition- but a definition was never so poetically expressed, such as only you can.

        • Fay Slimm.

          I am honoured you thought so highly of Eyeing my friend - -- the experience I had one day deserved I thought a tribute to the closeness I felt to a goldfish for a brief moment.

        • ANGELA & BRIAN

          ANGELA here - Good Evening FAY - Just feeding our KOI and your Poem struck a CHORD ! When we bought our home it had a neglected Pond. Brian has renovated it and installed a Waterfall for aeration. We bought three small KOI & other fish etc.
          Thanks for your *Ode to a Fish* it covers all the vital attributes which make a FISH a FISH. The Colour which makes each species distinctive - the Skin which is waterproof and almost transparent - the Fin which allows it to manoevre & its Flip which allows it to move gracefully in its 3D aquatic environment ! Delightful ! Thanks for composing (A Fave) and sharing !

          Would you rather be a FISH ? Sometimes I wish !
          Blessings & Peace & Joy & Love
          Angela & Brian & Smokey Cat !
          Please check our Fusion on *Dream Jobs* Ta A & B !


          • Fay Slimm.

            Your review catches the essence I felt and the call for a tribute to the moment of contact of fish with my finger..............unbelievable feeling of oneness - thank you for faving it dear duo and no I would rather be human offering closeness to fin fur and feather methinks.

          • Goldfinch60

            Wonderful words Fay, that communication with Nature is always so wonderful.

            Andy

            • Fay Slimm.

              Oh I really agree Andy - - - we who are close in heart to nature and can see more its wonders love to share them with others - so pleased you enjoyed the read.

            • L. B. Mek

              really liked the structure of each verse, almost an outline of a fish
              and especially liked your first lines of each verse, it felt like I was diving in and out from one verse to the next: 'A fish, A gill, A skin, A fin, A flip'
              with an immersive title and a poignant accompanying picture to bind it all together
              really well thought out, appreciated the layered imagery as well
              nature is so engaging, abundant and accessible,
              but the grey sandwich: of potholed gravel, grim - skyscraper horizons and gloomy skies drown it out, of most peoples sight

              • Fay Slimm.

                Your generous comment is highly appreciated my friend and am delighted that the read of Eyeing brought these perceptive thoughts to the fore - - - living alongside nature has so many benefits and the skyscraper world misses out so much - - - yes an encounter even for a very brief moment with fin, fur or feather is ever remembered and it was my pleasure to share the experience I had with a beautiful goldfish..........



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