Eyeing.
A fish,
like translucent shadow
slowly shows silver through dimly
low-lit submarine green.
A gill
like laced edge of poncho,
rising to roll a lake's morning face
steadily sways to breathe.
A skin,
of thinnest divide knows
it is separated from my airy flesh
solely by liquid need.
A fin,
touched by finger coated
in bubbles for closer contact slips
to more safety beneath.
A flip,
and fish dives fast below
in mist churned by interference
'tho glassily eyeing me.
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Fay Slimm. (
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A failed trout tickling? No, Fay wouldn't do that....
Though yes you would, without the final intent for supper..... re-reading...
Yes there it is... a beautiful description of truly communing with nature and the touch of a sleek wild fish.... I love the way you build this piece.... I have to ask, did you do it?
What mind does a fish possess, eyeing you?
Yep, immersed again in your words i bathed in this one. Keeping it as a fav.
Thanks D.A. for both your interest and lovely comment on Eyeing - and yes I did it for a brief moment and never forgot the feeling of oneness - I did the same one day with a dolphin who followed the boat I was in - and the feeling went just as deep - the picture was not of my hand I hasten to say.................. grateful thanks too for listing this one among your faves.
Good write Fay.
Thank you Orchi.
a definition within a definition- but a definition was never so poetically expressed, such as only you can.
I am honoured you thought so highly of Eyeing my friend - -- the experience I had one day deserved I thought a tribute to the closeness I felt to a goldfish for a brief moment.
ANGELA here - Good Evening FAY - Just feeding our KOI and your Poem struck a CHORD ! When we bought our home it had a neglected Pond. Brian has renovated it and installed a Waterfall for aeration. We bought three small KOI & other fish etc.
Thanks for your *Ode to a Fish* it covers all the vital attributes which make a FISH a FISH. The Colour which makes each species distinctive - the Skin which is waterproof and almost transparent - the Fin which allows it to manoevre & its Flip which allows it to move gracefully in its 3D aquatic environment ! Delightful ! Thanks for composing (A Fave) and sharing !
Would you rather be a FISH ? Sometimes I wish !
Blessings & Peace & Joy & Love
Angela & Brian & Smokey Cat !
Please check our Fusion on *Dream Jobs* Ta A & B !
Your review catches the essence I felt and the call for a tribute to the moment of contact of fish with my finger..............unbelievable feeling of oneness - thank you for faving it dear duo and no I would rather be human offering closeness to fin fur and feather methinks.
Wonderful words Fay, that communication with Nature is always so wonderful.
Andy
Oh I really agree Andy - - - we who are close in heart to nature and can see more its wonders love to share them with others - so pleased you enjoyed the read.
really liked the structure of each verse, almost an outline of a fish
and especially liked your first lines of each verse, it felt like I was diving in and out from one verse to the next: 'A fish, A gill, A skin, A fin, A flip'
with an immersive title and a poignant accompanying picture to bind it all together
really well thought out, appreciated the layered imagery as well
nature is so engaging, abundant and accessible,
but the grey sandwich: of potholed gravel, grim - skyscraper horizons and gloomy skies drown it out, of most peoples sight
Your generous comment is highly appreciated my friend and am delighted that the read of Eyeing brought these perceptive thoughts to the fore - - - living alongside nature has so many benefits and the skyscraper world misses out so much - - - yes an encounter even for a very brief moment with fin, fur or feather is ever remembered and it was my pleasure to share the experience I had with a beautiful goldfish..........
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