Neville

Sun Shy

Sun Shy

 

She was sun shy

She was parasolled

She was whiter than milk

 

He wasn’t Handsome

But he was loaded

And both had some drink 

 

He waved at her

She smiled back at him

Then gave a nod and a wink

 

Within a matter of moments  

They went for a wander

And he had tickled her pink ….

 

Comments8

  • Audax

    Finding love at the beach as well as fearing the thought of sunburn. Great way of describing your characters.

    • Neville


      ... thank you for visiting this little scribble Audax

      ... Neville

    • Fay Slimm.

      Wow the speed of that beautifully rhymed romantic happening leaves me quite wordless Nev - - your pen paints such on-going scenes with a finesse that makes me naughtily wanting more....................x

      • Neville



        ....................................... Many thanks ... I am overcome my lady .... :)

      • L. B. Mek

        entertainingly witty,
        a skip - back to days
        of eager pulses, with naught - but hunting season's blinkered vision
        for banishing, lonesome evenings

        • Neville



          .... thanks again L.B but really can't thank you enough .... Neville

        • orchidee

          That's me and her then. Notices subtle ending - I got me tickling-stick! Swoon! lol.

          • Neville



            Be careful Orchidee .. but enjoy ........ and thank you for not pushing to the front of the queue :)

          • dusk arising

            Must have been drunk to tickle her **** in a matter of a moment.

            Nicely put together with easy flow and a big smiling finale.

            • Neville



              .................... he could move like a tiger on Vaseline .. well once upon a time .. now more like an aging crow : ) many thanks DA my friend ..

              .. Neville

            • MendedFences27

              I wonder if she wandered and was tickled by the fella,
              when he wondrously presented a baton that outstretched her umbrella.
              Okay, I quit. There's no humor like the original. Yes, your rhyme had me laughing. Thanks for that. - Phil A.

              • Neville



                thanks my friend .. much appreciated .. Neville ..

              • Goldfinch60

                Pink can become people out of the sun.

                Andy

                • Neville



                  I am tickle and truly sir ... Neville

                • ANGELA & BRIAN

                  ANGELA HERE - Good Evening NEVILLE - Love the Poem ! Seems like although SHE was Shy of the Sun - the Lady liked *A Wee Drappy !* In my experience when a man is *LOADED* He doesnt need to be handsome too ! He had had a *Wee Drop too* Alcohol which *Maketh GLAD the Heart of Man* & *Available the Heart of Woman* ! So - It only took a wave & a smile & a nod & a wink ~ BINGO ~ C*est la Vie ! Thanks for Sharing

                  Love - Joy - Peace to You & Yours
                  Angela - Brian & Smokey Cat ๐Ÿงก๐Ÿ’™๐ŸคŽ

                  • Neville



                    ... Many thank you's Angela, I think you just about summed it up nicely .. Much appreciated and All Good Things to the three of ya ..



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