She lay the rose upon the leaf
As gently as a humblebee
And closed the book upon her grief
And shelved it for eternity
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A tender scene set to stay with the reader long after the four lines end. Thanks for sharing this fragment my poet-friend.
words well spent.... truly excellent ...
and welcome proper my friend
... Neville
Beautiful Poem that does say so much with a few words. Don
Symbols abound in this beautiful scene of conquering grief: Roses. leaf, humblebee (brilliant), book, shelved, eternity. Could be any form of grief and the reader then chooses their own and is drawn in. Just a lovely bit of poetry. - Phil A.
You are spot on... this is inspired by a specific dear friend dealing with grief related to her lost love, lost health, lost (estranged) family, and the tragic loss of a daughter... but for me it applies to every sort of grief... that old friend may pass away any moment and I am about to deal with my own growing grief. Pondering her rapid decline last night led me to post this in its unfinished state, more or less in her honor. Of course the grief will never be forgotten, but it may morph into something else less destructive, more comforting... one hopes.
ANGELA here (Brian is my Husband of 6 months !) Welcome to MPS it is a proactive site! Thanks for your first poem which has already had some good reviews! I love the MANTRA. We all suffer bereavement in most years - Your Poem suggests we should respect the departed & draw the line otherwise we would drown in unrequited grief! Thanks for sharing. Please check our site - Thanks A & B.
Blessings - Love - Joy & Peace
Angela & Brian 💛💛💛
I thought I'd better contribute more than a comment before you guys ban me! (-:
There may be pain, regret, sadness and grief with and ending but, as you poem suggests, that is not the way to carry on in life.
Both sad and uplifting. Sophisticated.
So much said in few words, that grief will not longer be with her.
Welcome to MPS.
Wow said in awesome creatively crafted metaphor. Great in brevity. You ought to write more with such talent. Kudos!
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
Beautifully stated
Gerard Manley Hopkins was notorious for leaving fragments...I’ve got multitudes of them lying around in little green “Memoranda” printed by the Federal Supply Service. Now get on out there and start putting together your fragments into a genuine catalogue of work my friend! Speaking like a Texan to a fellow Texan, just two government servants conversing, sorry for my brashness.
Loud and clear and perfectly welcome!
Perfect.
I have visited each of your two current posted poems here before and on several previous occasions
.. I thought this time, I would leave my mark ....... again .. excellent in my opinion ...
Thanks... I am still working and as an agency head, managing through Covid keeps me busy 23.5/7, but in the few moments I have to visit I enjoy poking my nose in amongst this cozy interesting little community. I'll try to contribute a little more often!
No worries .. no pressure ... I understand entirely 🙂
A beautiful poignant poem Jarcher54
Keep writing ✍ and safe during these challenging times.
FineB
What a beautiful, moving image!
Thank you.
A brief and perfectly phrased beautiful poem. Love it !!!
Short but sweet ) beautiful words
I am quite sure, being the lover of words and more specifically of poetry, that I am ...
I was almost certain to gravitate back to this little gem ...
It is after all, one that can easily stand the test of time ...
Neville
I came back to check and hit the heart shaped button while I was here .. and yes, it is still truly excellent my friend .................Neville
............. lovely words re-visited ..
Wow...just four lines, but so many emotions packed into it. It is like a zip file. Pure art!
An award winning write,..as far as I'm concerned🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🏆🍾🕊
Grieving is such a familiar stranger, like an unopen'd book gathering dust on a shelf. But once 'unfolded' can be closed again and put away for good. There it goes in a shelf of other books on other circumstances of grief. Thanks for sharing, J. /Rik.
Wow - hit me hard!
Jon, you are too kind. Thanks. One day soon I hope to post a few more things... but I am still working as well as caring for a disabled son and other things... love your contributions, be they poems or comments. You make me feel like I belong.
Very nicely done, Jarcher
in view of you bumping into me earlier, whether intentionally or by accident, I subsequently felt somewhat obliged to return to a page where I felt really most comfortable for another peek, you understand .. and yes indeed .. they remain just as I previously left them .. darn near perfect ... Neville
I am due for a couple new contributions... if I can set aside my briefs and memos and committee amendments for a few moments! Keep me engaged, will you, with your various levels of dry wit and unassuming charm.
aw gawsh sir, he can but try 🙂
excellent.....
even i need to use less words here.
Yes, sometimes less is more... a lesson I learned from watercoloring... too much work and it's all muddled. Thanks!
I love this, in so few words and yet it fills me with with words I could never come up with in saying just the right thing at the right time, thank you
You are just a little too kind... feel free to say all the nice things you can think of, my fellow Texan!
🙂 🙂
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