Neville

A Solitary Passing

A Solitary Passing

 

No doubt

the flies will come for me today

they are always hungry, aren’t they

and since I have not moved for hours

they will surely

all begin to congregate accordingly

Yes, take note …

 

All these

new breaths of mine

are taken deliberately and shallow

For these are dark times, and anyway

beside the flies

there are no lovers, friends or neighbours

left to mourn this most solitary of passing’s ….

Comments8

  • Goldfinch60

    But I am with you in Spirit, preferably Laphroaig.😈😈😈.

    • Neville



      ............................ What could possibly be better than that ... Cheers n down ya neck my friend ..

    • Lorna

      Neville - really beautiful this one..... it's sad but I find it so peaceful........

      • Neville



        ..... ... Thank you so very bloomin much dear Lorna ... muchly appreciated and then some tooly ...

        • Lorna

          With lots of chocolates for me to eat........ (Eliza)...........

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        • Fay Slimm.

          The read gave me a picture of the dire situation when on battlefields soldiers often die slowly and yes with flies as their only companions - - a most solitary passing indeed is that end which comes during war and one we must never forget. Hope this is near to the message your haunt of a write meant my caring friend - - if not then I stand to be corrected and willingly .........x

          • Neville



            That'll do nicely Fay ... x

          • orchidee

            Ya can't beat flies - or can ya? Swot 'em then!

            • Neville



              I think you are thinking of eggs, or pheasants even .. but never mind ........... cheers

            • dusk arising

              Every young recruit of every cause should be made to completely understand what you have written today and to meditate upon it for it opens up so many otherwise hidden aspects of conflicts consequence.

              I have written upon similar lines before and at this time of year we prepare for the 11th Nov when no doubt i and others shall air words of consequence again.

              • Neville



                Many thanks DA

                ... Neville

              • The Uneducated O.A.P

                This sets the target I have to reach.
                It's a fav for me.

                • Neville



                  How bloomin kind of you squire ... & unexpected too ..... Much appreciated U O.A.P :)

                • Romantic Bloom

                  Such lonely sadness! Well written!

                  • Neville



                    .......................................................... Thank you kindly RB .. much appreciated ..

                  • Laura

                    Neville,

                    A top notch write.
                    Writing in the first person immerses this reader into your subject’s plight. It makes me feels like I want to be there to comfort and ease the pain in some way.
                    All I can do now is to offer prayers to all who have lost their lives in such dire situations.

                    Laura🌻

                    • Neville



                      Thank you kindly Laura .. for your comment and such a nice gesture too .. 🌻



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