And so the waves whispered...
There’s a place all too familiar
which is imprinted In your mind
A place So serene and beautiful
a precious memory left behind
And so the waves whispered...
It was our waves in twilight hours
as the sunset coated the sky
Upon our cascading waters
Its hues Glistening in your eyes
And so the waves whispered...
Our ultimate waves of serenity
your soul sailing upon the mist
You floated like Clouds in the sky
as we blessed you with our kiss
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May those waves forever whisper their love upon you RB.
Andy
Thanks Andy! Smilez
A fine write RB.
I whispered - or yelled - "Cooeeeee! Do ya hear me?!" (Do shut up Orchi. lol).
Coo coo , Smilez
what a beautiful title and followed closely by three perfectly precise verses separated only by a necessary ripple ..
Thanks Neville!!!! Much appreciated! Hope all is good your way
My pleasure my friend .. all okay thanks ..
'It was our waves in twilight hours
as the sunset coated the sky
Upon our cascading waters
Its hues Glistening in your eyes'
I cherish work's that plunge straight into the deep end, no gradual build-up or tentative intro's, I found your write immersive and captivating - from first to last line,
your chorus serves a distinct purpose, your subtle imagery and metaphors tease out that picturesque scene you elegantly paint, with words humming to a seamless beat,
subtle, ever so subtle: a great read
Woohoo! Wow what a wonderful critique, very much appreciated dear Sir,
Thanks again for your time!
A wonderfully calming read Dove -- especially liked the continued flow of the title throughout.
Thanks Fay! Yes, repeat lines, ingrains the message deeper! Smiles to you dear Lady
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