Fay Slimm.

Feelings

 

 

Feelings.

 

Unsettled my sleep,
yet were I with thee
each night would be
bedded in sated need.

 

Uneasy my soul,
yet were I to hold
thee as mine alone
would feelings unfold.

 

Unrested my mind,
yet were I now thine
on fire would be night
while we Paradise find.

Comments7

  • orchidee

    Good write Fay.

    • Fay Slimm.

      My thanks for your visit and read dear Orchi,

    • Neville

      the Guinea pig is write my lady ... so perfectly placed and superbly crafted .. these words might easily be a single stand alone love poem of immense tenderness and longing ... Or indeed three shorter but no less emotionally charged little cameos .....

      Neville

      • Fay Slimm.

        My sincere appreciation for this thoughtful comment on Feelings dear Nev..... on looking at your observation I can now see how the poem could be read in two ways - -- glad you enjoyed the read my friend and thanking you ever so kindly for your visit my friend....................x.

      • dusk arising

        Deep felt longing pours from your words. Sleepless nights of unfulfilled desire.

        Written in a classical style and is perfection of purpose.

        To fine a piece to be overlooked, into my fav's.

        • Fay Slimm.

          Delighted you liked the depth I tried to capture in Feelings D.A. and double thanks too for adding the piece to your list of faves.

        • ANGELA & BRIAN

          ANGELA HERE ~Good Evening FAY = Thanks for caring & sharing. Brian & I (& Smokey) are very contented @ the end of the DAY - Together ! So we can relate - in the present tense - AMEN

          V 1. I slept alone for 32 Years - But now I know what I was missin* !
          V 2. In a time of stress (like COVID 19) TWO minds in Harmony - are tenfold better than ONE solo !
          V 3. Come on Brian - Light my Fire !

          Love the Visual _ Full of PATHOS !
          Blessings ~ Peace & Joy & Love
          Angela - Brian - Smokey 💛💛💛

          • Fay Slimm.

            You got the feel of the piece spot on and I can tell my dear Angela that you second the message the poem contained. Thanks a load for your visit and comment.

          • Clara

            Truly beautiful. Such longing here... Almost tangible ache. Thank you for sharing this.

            • Fay Slimm.

              Hi Clara - - My gratitude for your visit to view Feelings. Thank you too for your comment and am so pleased you enjoyed the read.

            • Goldfinch60

              Yet more wonderful words from your pen Fay, Paradise is there within you.

              Andy

            • L. B. Mek

              elegantly executed, an immersive write with an element of inclusivity - as if, you're sharing a truly sacred truth with your readers

              • Fay Slimm.

                Your kind and considered comment is truly appreciated my friend. - So pleased you like my version of Feelings.



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