Feelings.
Unsettled my sleep,
yet were I with thee
each night would be
bedded in sated need.
Uneasy my soul,
yet were I to hold
thee as mine alone
would feelings unfold.
Unrested my mind,
yet were I now thine
on fire would be night
while we Paradise find.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: November 18th, 2020 05:19
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Good write Fay.
My thanks for your visit and read dear Orchi,
the Guinea pig is write my lady ... so perfectly placed and superbly crafted .. these words might easily be a single stand alone love poem of immense tenderness and longing ... Or indeed three shorter but no less emotionally charged little cameos .....
Neville
My sincere appreciation for this thoughtful comment on Feelings dear Nev..... on looking at your observation I can now see how the poem could be read in two ways - -- glad you enjoyed the read my friend and thanking you ever so kindly for your visit my friend....................x.
Deep felt longing pours from your words. Sleepless nights of unfulfilled desire.
Written in a classical style and is perfection of purpose.
To fine a piece to be overlooked, into my fav's.
Delighted you liked the depth I tried to capture in Feelings D.A. and double thanks too for adding the piece to your list of faves.
ANGELA HERE ~Good Evening FAY = Thanks for caring & sharing. Brian & I (& Smokey) are very contented @ the end of the DAY - Together ! So we can relate - in the present tense - AMEN
V 1. I slept alone for 32 Years - But now I know what I was missin* !
V 2. In a time of stress (like COVID 19) TWO minds in Harmony - are tenfold better than ONE solo !
V 3. Come on Brian - Light my Fire !
Love the Visual _ Full of PATHOS !
Blessings ~ Peace & Joy & Love
Angela - Brian - Smokey 💛💛💛
You got the feel of the piece spot on and I can tell my dear Angela that you second the message the poem contained. Thanks a load for your visit and comment.
Truly beautiful. Such longing here... Almost tangible ache. Thank you for sharing this.
Hi Clara - - My gratitude for your visit to view Feelings. Thank you too for your comment and am so pleased you enjoyed the read.
Yet more wonderful words from your pen Fay, Paradise is there within you.
Andy
elegantly executed, an immersive write with an element of inclusivity - as if, you're sharing a truly sacred truth with your readers
Your kind and considered comment is truly appreciated my friend. - So pleased you like my version of Feelings.
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